Score: 4
"I couldn't feel it."
date: July 31, 2008
Are the drawings traced photos? It kinda looks that way - specially with the girl on the bus and some of the folk in the park.
The animation looks really stilted though - like you needed to draw more frames. Specially with the boy kicking the ball. Having 2 frames of the guys in the park - one with them all looking at him, one looking at each other just isn't enough. Try to draw them turning around, or at least fade one into the other so it doesn't look so cheap.
The shot of his feet moving through the water was brilliant though.
You should have actually filled his eyes with white - they're currently just holes and we can see through them when he's walking through the street.
I get why he's drawn so differently from everyone else, but it would have been nice to see some sort of profile, rather than just a curve. And the coloured lined people he sees - I'm not sure if that was just something you wanted to experiment with, but there seems to be no reason for them being rendered differently and it comes across as almost jarring,
Not a terrible piece, but by the end it started to drag for me. I guess he's just feeling depressed, but with no reason given, I couldn't empathise.
