Score: 4
"Ok..."
date: August 20, 2008
Well, you took the time to give me somewhat "constructive" criticism so I figured I'd return the favor.
I think I'll start with what was on everyone else's mind when they started to watch this. Preloaders help. That way it doesn't freeze when loading and people can actually FOLLOW the story. Being someone who finds being able to follow the story very important, I'm sure you understand that.
Next thing, your characters are pretty inconsistent. One minute they're just stick figures with heads, the next, they're people with detailed faces next to the screen. When their mouths move, they look like some sort of monkey because their chins don't even move. I didn't know whether he was trying to talk or clear something out of the front of his teeth. The backgrounds look decent at sometimes and rushed at others. If you're going to spend time on the backgrounds, spend time on making the characters in front of them as well.
Also, if you want to make it clear to people how much time it took you to make the first shot, that basically tells them that you took way less time on the other shots, which is obvious when watching.
I'm not going to spend too much time commenting on the music because thats obviously how you envisioned it (at least I hope).
And I feel I must address what you commented on before about my music not being streamed. It actually is. It plays as an event because it's placed inside a movie clip so there wouldn't be any sound delay. That might just be something you don't pay attention to when making your movies (along with a few other things). But hey, it was for school and you just didn't have time.
However, the movie itself had potential. So did the story. But the apparent lack of effort just made me turn it off. You know what that's like. So I give you a 4.
September 6, 2008
Author's Response:
yeah, i think you know the response to each of your comments. i either explained myself in other responses or things are just assumed when you know it was completed in about 2 good days work. and i didn't feel like getting a preloader cause its only like 700 kb. your comp's gotta be slow as shit to freeze up on this. and your movie did keep playing the music after i right clicked and stopped it.
but at least both of our movies have something in common, we both couldn't watch them all the way through... which says something about each flash doesn't it. i thank you for the 4! this really doesn't deserve that. its just for a chuckle.