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Story Of Zero's 1

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May 6, 2008 | 9:07 AM EDT

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Hell0! P's (Me) here again, and i'm finished with a new animation.
Wow, only 5 months with flash, so i hope you wont be too harsh!
I am still noob, but who cares? :'D

Thank you very much, www.EscapistMagazine.com and Yahtzee for the inspiration.
Please visit the site for Gamereviews <3
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Yup, new characters means new war and blood! Well, this movie has not really a very complicated
plot or a very good story, but its very simple.

Story description:
There's this good guy who wants to kill the General .. of the badguys.
He's armed and very smart, but you'll have to watch it.

I dont know if this will be a good idea,but i want to see if it is sucessfull, i will make more.
Right now, this is only PART 1! So i'll see if i make more, depending on if it goes bad or good.

Anyway, thank you everybody who has supported me to do this!

Enjoy!

Peatrit.

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HatsbyHatsby

Rated 2 / 5 stars

I'm being nice, mommy.

All right.

First of all, this wasn't bad.
I've seen worse and you've obviously worked hard on this.

However, here are some things that could be improved in the future:

- There were quite a lot of spelling mistakes. I don't see any excuse for them, as there are plenty of online dictionaries available. It's a shame to have typos in something you worked on.
- Although the music was okay and most of the animation was halfway decent, I found it to be a bit boring. I guess I'm one of those tiresome people who complain about story and plot, but I do think that, as a beginner, you should first develop strong plots and storylines (on a small scale of course) to make up for your lack of experience. I'm pretty sure you'd be able to give your work a lot more appeal if you had a good message. You see, people usually like flashes that are either really well animated or have a really good story. Eyecandy or braincandy so to speak. Those that have both or incredibly popular, from what I've seen.

My advice to you.

Start small: Ambition is good, but you don't want your work to go unappreciated because you don't have the skill to pull it off as well as you had imagined it.

Take your time: Keep working on said smaller scale until you become better, until you're satisfied with your skills. There's no rush. It takes years to become great.

Be creative: Don't just do what everybody else does because everyone else is doing it. Try to come up with your own thing. Something YOU think is good. It'll give you the motivation needed to improve.

Sorry for the long-ass review.



Faraz-AhmedFaraz-Ahmed

Rated 1.5 / 5 stars

Dude...

Mate, what the hell. I thoguht the animation started already, and then it says "PLAY".
I was like wtf o_O
*btw- at the end it has him finsihed shooting the MP5's, why are there bullets on the floor? Shouldn't they be bullet cases?*
Also, it's wayyy to slow. One of the most boring animations i've ever seen.
Add some colour, do something more original and fix the backgrounds, they sucked balls. Especially where you have big lines merging with thin lines. The perspectives sucked and the drawing was very poor. The gun's didnt fit in with the movie.
Don't do another, do something different, but you have started already so it's good. But take advice from more expirienced people.


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Hi5erHi5er

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

hey Pman its me Bob ^^

To be honest with you I think you are doing very well!

I have just finished watching all your latest animations and I must say you are definatley improving quickly, my favourite was "The Patriot".

Heres my words of advice:

- Keep watching the tutorials I showed you
- Your art work is fantastic! Now we just need to get the animation sorted :D
- Try animating smaller things first and then slowly make your ideas bigger, that way it makes animating easier...
- Practice working at "24 FPS" or above, as it is much easier to animate with.

Hope this helps and good luck in the future ^^



sam-delitanssam-delitans

Rated 5 / 5 stars

not bad for your second!

10 for hard work put in! 10 for animation itself as it was your 2nd try! considering it was good. but 8 and 9 because the music, blood and graphic were kinds bad. but anyway! overall still 10!!
i really want to know what your third is gonna be? u might wanna imporve by putting faster pace so that it can earn the viewer's attention. slow-motion are recommended but not that slow.. still, your a noob and so am i :). we both got areas of improvement also. simple story, maybe rather long and boring though(no offence).
still looking forward for your next aniamtion :D


PeAtrit responds:

Why, Thank you Sam.

I will do my best, although if you want to know my next upcoming,
Check out VF, then '' The True kings '' ^^


IHaveNo-UsernameIHaveNo-Username

Rated 3 / 5 stars

Not bad

You might want to lower the file size next time. The music did not fit at all too in my opinion.

I see the effort you put in there, but there were plenty of mistakes that lowered the score I have you.