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This is my first flash film. Yes i kno it sucks, i kno there is no background. im still new to this.
Most of it is tweens but random bits are FBF.
Im open to criticism as usual.
Used: Flash 8
Time taken to make: about 3 weeks
Interesting enough :)
what it didn't have in one made up for in another. ok graphics but it made up with a funny ploy of what all guys hate and would love to do shoot there ex and give them the revenge they deserve. Your parachute was really good I liked it, the plane should have exploded and even though it kinda reminded me of how a dart hits the dartboard and just sits there. the drawn paintball gun was very well drawn and I'm not into stick figures much but you definetly caught my interest :)
Thankyou very much. at first when i drafted the CoL, the parachute was horrificly terrible, but my mate moaned about it, he tried nd couldnt do it so just to show him up i made htis one. Yeh, im not so good wiv flash just yet so i just made the plane stick, I watch al the n00bs just put a big blob or sumfin for an explosioni so ill think ill wait till im better. And i didnt spend tht long on the paintball hun, was fun tho!
This was not bad for a beginner.
But u could have made it more like a animation.
but still great for an nuub.
Keep working and it will get better
Not bad for a start...
...i guess, some of the designs were okay. You need some more sounds and maybe a background music. You can find free music in the audio portal ;)
Wat people look for in movies are:
Sound: 6/10 (As a sound mixer i thought they were there in the accurate timing)
Plot: 8/10 (You did have a story line which does make a gd movie)
Humor: 3/10 (People do like it when flash movies are funny)
But overall 5/10 stars. Keep working hard, and you will go far. ;)
Thanks, as i said below , this was really a muck around, the sounds i had problems with as they wouldnt import so was annoying trying to find ones tha worked. yeh, i think the sound was rather accurate, except the plane bit, that wasnt as i relly wanted it but was the best i could do.
Thanks for your review
i wanna shoot all my exes! fun a little short, wanted more abuse ha, keep trying your great!
Thank you, yes i know, ex's can be annoying, im kind of lucky, ive had no problems witht them.
Can't help it!
Sorry, but I cannot agree with you: I think this is a pretty darn cool submission and the lack of background doesn't bother me at all!
The main strength is that your man Lulham keeps smiling whatever happens, even while flying his aircraft into a mountain. And rather than ending up all gory, he simply ejects way too late. This kind of humour is definitely awesome IMHO.
The last part turns gory again, which is actually quite a pity. I think most gore on NG replaces well-thought out plots. If you're making another episode, I would recommend using a silly plot or situation as a basis and regarding the addition of any gore as optional ;-)
I think you did a great job!
Thank You, this realy was a throw together and a muck around, i dont know if im going to make another, i proberly will. Thanks for the support!
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