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Constructive criticizm is appriciated.
THIS IS DIFFERENT FROM THE ONE I SUBMITTED EARLIER TODAY. IT IS FINISHED.
Pretty good for one of your first animations id say dude
And its good thats its random guys, makes it funny, but story line should be longer.
Try voice acting next dude.
Ill Give Yoo A 6!
how much time did you spend on this seriosly that was crap well not complete crap il give you 2 for comedy and length (Constructive criticizm part->) if you could use tweens and it would look better than by all means use them
I'd like to see you do better -.-
primarily, that seems kinda random and pointless. you might have some story in your head, but it was not conveyed in the movie.
also, text bubbles are fine, but make the delay longer. i felt like i was racing the movie to read it.
make more effort on labels and such. the ms paint looking, poorly drawn label for shop makes the movie look really primitive. Given your animation, i would say you do have ability; the animation was smooth and the sound was pretty good.
if you address some of these, i think you could make good movies.
Ok, thanks a lot. Watch out for episode 2, It'll be coming soon.
Blue Pencilmate meets Red Pencilmate, but things don't go so well...
While taking the day off work, Lloyd and Glynis take in a movie
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