Score: 3
"didn't care for this (But freddy WAS nicely drawn)"
date: March 30, 2008
Kinda confusing mostly.
I liked the spoken intro - it had a nice lyrical rhythm to it.
Freddy was drawn quite nicely - I liked all the angular lines. Sorta looked as if you'd used modify>simplify or something, to good effect.
I think your character would have looked good drawn similarly though and the single eye is too far forward - the character kinda looks as if he only has one eye.
The mouths were moving way too fast - certainly keep the open shapes open for longer and don't necessarily try to fit in every single phoenome. When folk speak, they don't instantly close their mouths after each word.
Anyways, the plot itself just seemed a bit disappointing to me. It seemed like the highlight was meant to be the song, but for me that section just really dragged on. The start before that and the bit after just didn't really have any impact on me at all.
It seemed like a lot of the interesting action happened off-screen. Maybe show us a silhouette of the body he's just killed?
And for me maybe a little more exploration of the characters would have helped it have an impact.
Sorry, didn't care for this much.
_Review Request Club_
April 1, 2008
Author's Response:
thanks for the review anyway :)
oh and with Freddy, I didn't use anything like Modify>Simplify or whatever - I drew it witha brush tool and tidied up the outline with the black arrow tool...
