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Ok I fixed some problems the first had. Hope this one is better!
I agree with FirexBandit...
The music fits the video nicely just like he said. Also, I agree that the graphics do need some improvements. The text was hard to see in some places due to the back ground so adding a text box would help tremendously. Again, in agreement with FirexBandit, the text is does go too fast to read in some places (thought I don't have that problem as much :P). One thing I myself would like to add is that the scale of the sprites to the background was off so the sprites looked very tiny compared to the scenery. Another thing, though it may sound like I'm being too analytical, is that at the start of the movie X was 32-bit and when he walked off to the next scene he was magically 64-bit (or was it 128-bit, I forget :/). I'm just saying try to keep it consistent when you use sprites because it makes it look less like you rushed through it and more like you spent good time on it. Lastly, though it may sound like I'm being too picky again, try to align things like when they teleport in so it look more streamlined.
tl;dr makes some changes and I hope to see the next one. J00 get 3/5 and 5/10.
Sorry but there are so many things wrong about this movie I don't even know where to begin.
Learn what motion tweens are, how to convert to symbols, how to change FPS, and get some sound effects. Then practice for the next two years, and try again.
I can't say I've seen part I, but this is what I make of this part ;)
Pros- Seems like its your work. It seems original, and has some action in it. Keeps the viewers tense too..some anyway. Music is nice ;) Fits the video nicely.
Cons- Graphics could use a touch up, but I'm not going to be a hypocrite, I'm no artist. The wording is a little hard to read at some parts due to the background.
Improvement (opinion only)-
*Add a text box/background to the words so that they're legible.
*Drop the speed a touch on the conversations, alot of it is to speedy for the length of it.
*If the reviews and votes turn out nicely, keep 'em comin'!
That's about all I can think of for now, maybe other users will have a better view on this.
My main complaint is that all the characters and backgrounds seem to be too still at times. I think you should have them animated. Also, nice music!. Some sound FX would be nice, too.
A starving village ask a water spirit to help them.
Strawberry clock forgets his ticket on the train but maybe he'll be ok
a clock day story
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