Score: 8
"Great short"
date: March 3, 2008
It was clean, it had a great story, and it was very cinematic. The only change that I'd recommend comes at the very end. When the hand comes into frame and the bat drops into it, it's not easy to see what they are. Personally, I think the close-up on the hand and bat are unnecessary, and since it isn't used anywhere else in the movie, it kind of throws things off-balance. I'd recommend sticking with a mid-range POV, maybe the same distance that you used when the character was getting the bat out of the back of the truck. Whether it's just him standing next to the pinata-man and looking at him, or some other scenario, it'll feel more evened out, in my opinion. Great shit, though- I enjoyed it.