Choices: a poem by Vert


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Submitted: 01/07/2008 | 05:22PM EST

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Current Score: 3.41 / 5.00

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!READ THIS BEFORE PLAYING THE MOVIE, PLEASE!

First off: There are "spelling mistakes" in the poem, but they are there for a reason, so don't point them out in the reviews, please.

Second: If you don't like poems, then I heartily recommend you go watch another flash, since you'll probably become bored (unless you like pirates and ninjas).

Third: If you think this poem is good (and different) enough, please submit it to the "Experimental" flash collection.

Fourth: Please don't use the right click menu to "Play" and "Forward", as that'll only mess up the poem and you'll be forced to re-open the movie. And if you don't like the narration, don't forget you can switch it off at the main menu.

Lastly: Try out different answers, since the poem has paths that are very different one from another (some more serious, others more humorous). And, above all, enjoy (hopefully).

Oh, and I'll respond to every review, so please feel free to leave them, I greatly appreciate feedback!

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Average Score: 8.1 / 10

Score: 8
Shanus

"Excellent"

by: Shanus
date: June 8, 2008

An excellent idea, with a little polishing needed to be done

Graphically it wasn't that impressive at all. You need to work on your presentation alot more. The jpegs were also a little grainy, it just didn't look that pretty.

The audio was good, well the end voice part. Nicely recorded with only minimum crackling. Would've liked to see some backing track to the whole thing though. Would've filled in some gaps.

Overall I though this was a pretty innovate game all together, that's why I scored it so high, but it could've been so much better, with minimal adjustments. But good start

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June 10, 2008

Author's Response:

Hum, you think that adding a backing track could improve the movie? That's an interesting sugestion, but it seems a somewhat risky one, because if the music is too loud or "interesting", it could take the focus away from the poem. There's also the issue of what single piece of music (after all, I'd probably need to use a single music, as changing the song would be pretty distracting) would fit a poem like this, that has so many diferent styles.
Still, it's something that I hadn't thought of, so thanks for the sugestion. And the compliments and the review!

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Score: 8
Little-Rena

"Clever"

date: June 8, 2008

Although the main presentation of the menu and everything could be improved quite a lot with buttons that are equal in size and look much better than just text in a border. The main point to the flash was done very well, all the choices and possiblitys was really a good idea and well thought out I belive to get it to work in like you did here.

The way it ended was the same for each which did keep it consistant but I do think it must have been quite hard to stick to the same lines for the start and end, so good job writting poems to fit for all and still sound good. Though the text could be improved too with presentation, it was still good. The narration was pretty good to, almost perfect even but there was something there that sounded a little muffled.

All the same, this does seem to be a good idea, the only problems I have with this is the presentation of it. I mean you have the poems done well and the narration is almost there to, good work overall.

4/5

<3

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June 8, 2008

Author's Response:

Thanks for all the compliments! You're dead right about many things, specially about how it was -very- hard to write each ending for the poem to be the same. I can't remeber exactly why I chose that sort structure for the poem, but it meant that I had to somehow weave it into each poem ending... which was probably the hardest part of writing the poem (which, in turn, was the hardest part of the flash). Thanks for noticing!

The problem with the narration is that I have only a reasonable microfone and my computer is way too noisy, making the recording quality a bit low (but it's definatly improved from past recordings, I think). You're also dead right about the presentation, which is why I'm determined to seek out a co-author if (and it's almost certain) I make a new flash poem. Thanks for the review!

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Score: 7
aldlv

"nice"

by: aldlv
date: June 6, 2008

was pretty funny
I laugh a lot
it was simple... but is one of the best ideas for a flash I ever saw in a long time
too bad it was too short
just 3 questions..
c'mon... you got a great idea...
you could do it a lot better
doing something like 5 maybe 10 question
(i know.. that would have a lot of speech) but that quantity of different options would make it awesome

think about it for the next time

ohh yes.. btw... continue practicing with the graphics... they need some work

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June 7, 2008

Author's Response:

It's not easy to expand the number of questions. With just 3 questions, I already had to write 12 "endings" and the number increases exponencially with the number of questions. For example, if I used 5 questions, with 2 choices each, I'd have to write down 2*2*2*2*2 = 32 endings (not counting all the in-between stuff). It's viable, but 10 questions with 2 choices would mean 1024 endings... which would be a life's work, if it's at all possible!
Still, I do agree with you that a few more choices would be interesting (and my original intention included such a possibility), but the task is considerably harder then it seems. I.e., writing the poem itself is probably the toughest part of the flash... In any case, thanks for the review and the compliments!

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Score: 8
Haggard

"\m/"

date: June 6, 2008

Very nice flash. When I started this I didn't knew what to expect and I prepared for the worst (like Coop I feared that every line would have a slightly different tone, thus ruining the poems completely), but instead I got the best I could wish for! :)

While the presentation is very minimalistic the narration is done really great and I liked the poems I could "create" with my choices.

But still I think the presentation needs more "eye candy". Some background images would be a good start, for example.

I also noticed that the "Turn narration On/Off" button didn't work.

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June 7, 2008

Author's Response:

Hmm, are you sure that the narration button wasn't working for you? The button itself dosen't indicate when the narration is on or off, something I was incapable of doing, but it worked fine for me when I tested it just now. Do you have an older version of Flash?
In any case, thanks for the compliments and after all the feedback, I've pretty much decided on doing another poem, but with a little help so as to improve the overall presentation and level of polish. And thanks for the review!

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Score: 8
Coop83

"Well Done"

by: Coop83
date: June 3, 2008

The main thing that I feared for this poem 'generator' when I first played it was that your voice would sound a little different in tone for each line, but it sounds like you've done well and kept the tone pretty even, allowing the combinations of lines to flow into one another.

What I would suggest is that you maybe do something more for these poems, possibly including a basic background picture for each person's individual choices... that could take quite a lot of images to get working properly, but I think that with the basics that you've shown on the animation front, you should be able to produce that quite quickly.

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June 4, 2008

Author's Response:

You noticed the (relativly) even tone! That's a small detail that few people would perceive, so thanks for noticing and pointing it out.
But do you think that using still images alone would be suficient? I'm not so sure myself... I get the feeling that new interations of flash poems would probably need some movement, specially to please viewers who don't care much for poetry.
Thanks for the review, Coop!

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