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I'm throwing together some of my bytesize cartoons into one convenient collection here.
Includes one unreleased 'toon so it's not a complete waste of your time!
DudleyDooDooRight, you're an excellent reviewer, so professional, but freaking relax a little. Remember we are all amateurs. You seem like a mad dad. Give fucking suggestions, in a funny way!!! Not complainments. School teach us that complainments taste like shit. Just a review for a review.
After i watched this i had to o to the bathroom twice!..tuna lol.
the reason his surfboard floats beside him is...
...it was forged in a fiery volcano by Hephaestus the god of the forge! Surfboard of the gods!
BLESS ME WITH SOME TOTTALY AWESOME WAVES!!!
IL GIVE YOU 9 BECAUSE IT WAS TOO SHORT !!!
For a short subject to work, the joke has to be excessively funny or outlandish with fast pacing and the right context. I think of quick cut scenes used by Monty Python as a prime example. The first bytesize short was more mean-spirited than funny. The joke itself would be funny in the right context with faster pacing. The second short was the best of the three. It was absurd and elicited a smile, but I didn't find it to be side-splitting. The final joke just did not go anywhere. It lacked enough absurdity to be anything more than "eh."
The animation quality reminds me of Hanna-Barbera and UPA limited animation techniques, where the subjects are presented in 2-D only and movement is limited to one or two levels. The only difference is that the quality of your artwork is much higher, with more realistic images and a brighter color palate.
This type of humor may work for others, but these bytesized shorts didn't do it for me. They seemed to be jokes that needed broader context to go anywhere; the bytesized shorts Stamper put together made more effective use of pacing, context and absurd humor. These shorts are missing that context and "get to the joke" pacing to make them anything more than OK. I prefer your longer-format work, where you can give your jokes time to develop.
Animation: 5/10 (what's with the free-floating board in the third short?)
Sound: 9/10 (the voices were well-acted, but all sounded similar)
Humor: 0/10:5/10:3/10 = 7/30
Overall: 32/60 = 5/10
Alfred's Back and Better Rendered than Ever
The gang attempts to raise money for turtle's surgery
Fighting the shame of our stations in life...
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