Score: 4
"The Ideas Are Good, But Needs Improvement"
date: December 22, 2007
I thought that you had the right idea about this. It was good at conveying the messages of the book and overall feel. It seemed like you made it in a hurry though, and I wish that you had put a little more effort into it. You had no scenery for the hitch-hiking part, and that just made it look boring. I must commend you on your car drawing, it was excellent! You didn't quite make it clear what happened to his car, you just sliced off the bottom of it. I think you could have made a longer flame animation, rather than a loop that was less than a second long. It would have been cool to see him lighting his money on fire, rather than just show it burning. Again, that could have used some kind of scenery, white backgrounds are ugly! Your text had parts cut off of it, "everything" appeared more like: "everythi," When you wrote "HIMSELF," the text was out of the frame and looked like, "HIMSE." The resolution of the images at the end was pretty low too. You could have found higher-res pictures! I know you could have! All in all, I think you had good ideas, but you didn't work hard enough to convey them well. I think it would be really cool if you worked a little more on this, and it could be a truly great flash.
December 23, 2007
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. I totally agree with you about it. I was really busy lately and I had lots of work with school. I made it for my english class, so there was a date I needed it done for. I drew that car possibly over a year ago, and used it for this because cars take extremely long to draw(thats why it's a jetta). I will consider making everything better and updating or resubmitting it because I am now on Christmas Vacation, so I will be free to make it any time.