Score: 8
"not bad at all for a first"
date: December 17, 2007
and not bad, even disregarding that fact. i like the mix of hand-drawn art and sprite art - it shows that you at least have an inkling of artistic talent. some shading on the hand-drawn bits would have been nice, especially since you didn't have to focus on character art. the story is pretty decent. it reminded me a lot of Shakespeare's "The Tempest," and the "silly" aspect of it wasn't overdone at all (like "MARIO ATE MAI CAIK OMG I KILL DAT MUTHA").
my main complaints are the lack of sounds and the terrible pacing. you should look up compression tutorials on this site to learn how to get that file size down. some sound would have been nice, like for the waves lapping the beach, and especially for the explosion. regarding pacing, it was slow and obnoxious. speech-text came in far too slow; just have it appear all at once and let the user read it at his or her own pace, and allow said user to press a key (probably the spacebar) to advance it, rather than having to click on an arrow.
other than the lack of sound and the pacing issues, this is very, very good for a first. a great start, good luck with the series.