Score: 6
"Building up a series"
date: October 28, 2008
So the plot is a little disjointed, with patches of needless filler material, which could be better developed for some laughs. Perhaps drag out the whole bank loan scene with Greg for a while and maybe have something longer about the doorman, who goes on about bums in the bank.
The animation style is impressive - the way that the characters walk is great, as that's usually where this sort of animation fails. I notice that your style is similar to MetalMaverick's. Did you watch much of his stuff to get this style, or did you just gravitate this way naturally?
I look forward to seeing the next instalment of this series, as it will be good fun to see how far the business gets, if it even gets off the ground in the first place.
[Review Request Club]
November 1, 2008
Author's Response:
When you talk about filler I imagine you are referring to the lame black screen with music. I agree with you on that. As for extending scenes, that is an interesting suggestion I will think about it for ph3.
I can't believe you liked the way they walked. I found it to be so terrible. But thanks. I have never seen a single Metal Maverick flash & I'm not exactly sure who he is. So you could say I gravitated this way naturally.
I also look forward to seeing the next installment of this. It's not going to be done for a while so don't hold your breath. Thanks for the review.
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