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A short animation I made for University. Tells the story of a man named Jeffery, who suffers from a split personality. This is my first NG submission.... So Enjoy!
Audio is From Aphex twin and Korn.
it was similar to David Firth's Roof Tiling and the movie Fight Club but It was still very good. a bit more creepy too
This was good
Alright I'm not gonna hassle you because according to some reviews your flash looked similar to another artist's work. This is your FIRST flash and you made it for your university. You took an interesting topic and tried to play it out as well as you could in this piece of flash. From me you get 100% on originality points there. Just because your work LOOKS like anothers doesn't mean it is. This is what came to your mind when it comes to schizophrenia and you made it in to a flash, simple as that, idk why people are complaining, you just made what you thought of, that's not copying someone's motives. Other than that, nicely done, but as a suggestion don't make the screen fizz too much. It was an excellent effect but you just used it too much. And that's about it, well done on your first flash!
i give it a 1 out of 5 which is 2 out of 10
Thats borderline too messed up to watch...
Man what messed up flash,it was good but the story was...well really frigged up and i hope that this was just made up lol...JK.on a different note though,i love the whole feel and sond you put into this it really made me get into it. I also think it is very origional (save for the flashing and scratching noises that was too much like the dave firth style) everything else was a bit like david's work but not quite the same,i really liked the narration in between frames and think this is the right thing for you (dont do them all like this though you will be labbled a david firth nock off).
over all dispite the messed up but origional story i think this was a good flash a
Leave the sadistic style cartoons to Mr. Firth
Ok, the flash animation (which i only saw was the mouth moving) was good. And your sketchings were excellent. Now, for future reference, try more movement, at first it looks like a collaboration of pencil drawings. Also, less of the skipping aronud, by that i mean the random "KSSST!" "DZZTT!" sounds, a few is good, and adds to the creepy-ness of the film, but too many, will make the viewer turn down their volume (like i did after the 15th "KSSZZZT!")
And finally, this does look ALOT like a David Firth film, and i'm sure you've heard that before. Specifcally the "Black and White cartoon about berries and rooftiles"
Watch some of his cartoons, and try to come up with your own concept.
A short film about a park bench
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