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A short animation I made for University. Tells the story of a man named Jeffery, who suffers from a split personality. This is my first NG submission.... So Enjoy!
Audio is From Aphex twin and Korn.
Audio neds work...
Your audio should be mixed at about 60/40 or even 70/30 voice/muzik & FX; Seems yours was just the opposite & that really cost you some points. Overall I thought this was interesting, rather "Firthish" in art style, but relied far too heavily on text in my opinion. While some text was needed, I think you'd have a much greater impact by letting the voice, art & FX tell the story; oftentimes a story can be told without any text or voice at all. Just some things I thought were worth considering as ways to improve. Regards, ZB.
Wow. that was dark. I see you're a fan of david firth? Nicely drawn too.
I would just improve the last drawing (where he lies on the ground) and the voice acting (the Jeffery voice).
The bad voice and the story were really cool. I also loved the drawing of the hands.
I usually don´t write to many reviews but i just had to comment this one. It was actually kind of spooky and I think it mostly had to do with the...well "buzzed" that came a little bit from nowhere. They really freaked me out at some points. And the other reason to why it has a kind of sppoky feeling when you watch it may be beacus it is not made in flash, or well, not drawn in flash. I allways find black and white hand-drawn this more creepy-looking than clean vector-graphic that mosty giva a kind of cartoonfeelin.
Well I can just say that I really liked the movie but in the next time try to use some diffrent music and try to first draw the art by hand on a paer and then make it in the computer in Flash-graphic, it might lose some of the sadness in the movie but I can ensure you that it will be popular, well atleast I think so cuz it might be the reason for why you didnt get any awards out of ut such as "daily feature". But you got a frontpage and that is just great :D
Hehe, keep it up mate :D
About this and what the guy below me said
In cases of severe shizophenic disorder what you posted is true(MOVIE) and oten there are signs left over from the dormant personality that can be viewed by the original
great fking vid tho loved the art if you look at my d/p on new grounds you'l understand.
A short film about a park bench
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