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They came from outer space. They came... to destroy our fungus.
Please watch the whole movie before giving it a crap rating.
All reviews are much appreciated.
Thanks to CrookedScepter, who originally taught me how to do colour tweens.
This was much improved over the first episode, that is for sure. The storyline in this episode actually made some sense, and I could follow what was happening. I was even kind of amused by the storyline, which turned out to be pretty unique and fun to watch. My favorite scene had to be when the bacteria started destroying the mushrooms. It's such a random event! The graphics, though kind of elementary were pretty unique, and actually looked pretty cool. Much better!
One thing that really annoyed me about this movie was that you kept changing the text between clickable and not, without warning. Towards the middle, I was looking at a screen of text waiting for it to disappear, but it did not for a while. Only after a minute did I realize that I was supposed to click the text to go on. Also, this could be so enriched with a ton of sound effects. There is so much going on, so much interesting stuff!
Glad you liked the plot!
The text was indeed probably my worst design choice ever.
Thanks for the reviews!
Bang! Huzzah! Bang! Yipee!!!
Aren't first attempts grand? ^_^
I'll try to give this my most thoughtful review despite the fact that many of the things that I advise now may already be obvious to you.
Although I found the graphical representation of the fungi, bacteria, and assorted gentlemen much too simplistic--they all fell under a consistent style, which I did find original and somewhat entertaining to see. When the gigantic bacteria beemed down from their poorly drawn UFO, I couldn't help but laugh to myself. The laughter would not have been at your artistic capability, but rather if you had a full and sophisticated sound track in the background, the score would have contrasted with your art in a comedic sense--and would have made the animation that much richer.
In turn, I found the art lacking. If there was some way for me to know that they were drawn in such a basic manner intentionally, then I could asses the matter differently. However, the supporting attributes of this flash did not give me that impression.
The "battle scenes" with the fungi were my personal favorite parts of the animation. I especially enjoyed the over-the-top outburst by the adjacent bacteria. However, despite the fact that I liked the explosions, they still were not animated that well. Still, something tells me I'm going to happily remember those few scenes for the rest of my life.
I have a functional problem with the interactivity of the movie. As you may already know now, the buttons were poorly made. I did not appreciate having to write where the text was drawn rather than the approximate area of where the text was written. It's simply more user-friendly to create buttons that have an invisible "box" behind them; so that way viewers will not have to snipe letters in order to activate buttons. Moreover, I had a hard time determining what was actually a button from what was actually just text. This left me (more than once) just staring at the screen waiting for something to happen--when of course nothing ever did.
Additionally, I think it would behoove you to use a font that mimics hand writing over using actual handwriting. If anything at all, it will help people like me, who do not recognize English as their first language, understand what you are trying to say with a greater clarity.
Overall, I found this movie to be frustrating at some points, and very enjoyable at others. The concept of bacteria vs. fungi has great potential, and the entire concept as a whole was ultimately only limited by its delivery.
The art was all deliberately drawn to be as simplified as possible. If I were doing this now, I would of course make curves more graceful, fill everything with the bg colour so stuff behind doesn't show through, etc. Artistic capability got me almost but not quite where I wanted to be.
Bgm is something I didn't put in due to not thinking it was important. At the time I often watched stuff with no sound at the uni library and so hoped to start a trend of silend stuff. It wasn't until afterwards (when I'd started bringing in headphones, then had the internet at our flat) that I realised how much a bgm could add to something.
I'm happy that those scenes have such a positive impact. It was kinda sparked by one scene in Usagi Yojimbo. If you've not read that comic, you should if you can. It's my favourite comic ever (the only one I still buy).
I didn't know about hit-boxes at the time.
Yeah, having some text be buttons, some not, is something I only later realised was a mistake.
Sad to hear it's still out there doing its fiendish stuff and causing aggro.
I wanted my text to represent ME and not just be some off-the-shelf font, yaknow? I'd now probably be able to draw better letters. Maybe make up my own font for this.
Glad you liked the idea and only disliked the delivery. I'm seriously thinking of remaking my first 2 movies sometime. Maybe after I've gone through my rite of passage and have upgraded to Flash MX.
Thanks for the great review.
I give this one a 10 also. This is better-written, but the other was just amazing, considering the movie and how encouraging your review was.
This is just totally thorough and awesome.
If you ever want more feedback on your stuff in progress, let me know. I'll have to get round to rating your existing movies sometime...
Haha! Enjoyable :)
This was a major, major improvement from your previous submission. I think overall it worked out quite well - the story line was good, the pace was a lot slower and easier to follow compared to your first movie, and it was pretty funny, too!
The beginning could have used some definate improvement, though, as the characters look like they'd been created in about 10 seconds with the paintbrush tool... But, it all went uphill from there, and I found that this was a pretty funny little movie. The show-up of Fungus Prime was great, a good finish dude, nice work :P
: Haha! Enjoyable :)
: This was a major, major improvement from your previous submission.
Always nice to hear. Good sense of positivity here.
: I think overall it worked out quite well - the story line was good, the pace was a lot slower and easier to follow compared to your first movie, and it was pretty funny, too!
Whilst you don't mention any specific moments, it seems you chose which aspects to praise quite thoughtfully.
: The beginning could have used some definate improvement, though, as the characters look like they'd been created in about 10 seconds with the paintbrush tool...
Fairly specific criticism. Good stuff. Could be more specific yet, of course (I assume it was the lack of visual detail that you felt weakened the opening characters? What about the lack of colour? I don't know... though presume you still weren't too keen on my purple usage.)
: But, it all went uphill from there, and I found that this was a pretty funny little movie. The show-up of Fungus Prime was great, a good finish dude, nice work :P
Very positive ending.
I like the review. My main criticism would be that it didn't have enough criticism. You could have mentioned the dodgy buttons. You could have mentioned any other number of sub-standard graphical effects. Or maybe some section of the story you found weaker than the rest?
I just felt like there was a lot more constructive crit. you could have given. It's nice hearing the praise as well though, but CC's more useful imo.
Well the good thing about this one at least it seem to have a story going with it. The first one was so short it was hard to tell. NOt sure why you did them with no sound. Maybe you had a good reason.
The text though I could read it with effort, could have been made a little bit easier to read. I rather have had a small button to click on thatn the text it self. Some parts the text would jsut on other times you had to click on it. That was a bit confusing, well not realy every time it looks like it stoped I checked, but a small button would have made it clearer to people. Or jsut put in a time delay with the text so peopel have tiem to read it all. No clicking involed then. Other than that it was ok it could have been better though.
Another review with a good amount of thought put in.
You open with a vaguely positive comment. But despite having nothing genuinely positive to say thereafter, your review retains a positive tone. Nice work.
The quote below:
'Some parts the text would jsut on other times you had to click on it. That was a bit confusing, well not realy every time it looks like it stoped I checked'
is hard to understand. I don't really know what you mean by that. I think I get the gist of what you're trying to say, but I'm not sure about the details.
Perhaps not your fault though.
The point about the poor lettershapes makes for useful feedback.
You give a number of quite specific suggestions, which is really nice.
The only thing I'd suggest is maybe throwing in a comment about how you felt regarding the main part of the movie - the story. Was it in any way amusing for you? Was it boring? Were there any parts of it you liked? I have no way of knowing.
Again, I realise that you shouldn't feel obliged to say such things and the review as you wrote it did make for a really enjoyable read.
Again, it was a short review, but it did have a good amount of content with no waffle.
I rate your review: 6.5/10
It was a pretty bad movie, I didn't really enjoy watching it, however, it was better than the rest of your movies...
First fo all, the graphics was very bad, I hate the way you use this pink and purple to do almost everything! Not to mention the fact that the black background was also awful and didn't match anything. Not to mention that the charecters (if you can call them like this) are also very awfully drawn (if you can call it that). You must improve your graphics.
Second of all, the style was pretty bad also, because of the bad graphics and the fact that you had to press on the words every single moment. The way this story is told is also pretty bad, why should I read your awful handwritting in order to understand that movie? The whole point of a movie is that you transport the words to animation. So I didn't really like the style. Not to mention the fact that there was no sound.
Third of all, there was no sound. What is it with your movie? Add sound, you must add sound!
The intercreativity was awful, ever heard of hit? While making a button made out of text, make him hit ass well. Also, it is annoying that I ave to click on the buttons all the time.
The script was pretty fine actually, but it was shown in a terrible way. Also, you should make the way you write it better, because it isn't written well.
Anyway, it is bad movie, bad!
A rather excellent review.
At least here you have a vague back-handed compliment. "however, it was better than the rest of your movies..."
Having said that, I question that statement and assume you didn't see 'Asteroids'.
The criticism is a lot more specific here, which is nice. You mention the colours, the terrible buttons, the handwriting, the fact that you don't like to read, the lack of sound...
You don't always express yourself properly though. You seem to be trying to teach me about the 'hit state' of buttons. But had I not learned about that elsewhere, I would have been bewildered.
Also, when you say I "should make the way you write it better, because it isn't written well." it's unclear if you're again referring to the typography or to the words I use; my use of the English language.
This review is actually very useful and had it not been so long ago, I would have learnt an awful lot from your review. Heck, I learnt a bit of stuff even now and it's great you get down to specifics here.
The one thing I'd mention is that you do seem to have an overly sarcastic tone, almost as if you're trying to grind down the creator at times.
" the charecters (if you can call them like this) are also very awfully drawn (if you can call it that)"
There's just no need to your parantheses. They do help to show your disdain for the creation, but ultimately would serve little function.
You say "The script was pretty fine actually," - another vaguely positive comment - but it'd be nice to know what exactly you liked about it. Was it part of the story? The actual text? (No, it couldn't be that, you said before you were opposed to it...)
Overall, it was actually a really useful review, but could do with at least one SPECIFIC positive comment. Comments aren't much use unless we know exactly what you're talking about.
Still, an excellent review, with lots of specific attempts at constructive criticism.
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