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Everyone likes flashes about prostitutes! Well, here it is, my first real flash.
It's a serious short about a prostitute. I might make sequels to this later, with other protagonists that fall under the description of "Les Enfants Innocents".
Props to Yesaspoon, Arnas and Hockeymonster56 for making some awesome tunes I was able to use. Thanks, guys.
For now, enjoy!
HAHAHAHA Lorania bobit like a mofo
evry time i watch this dude. i rember that lorania bobit laddie that chopped off her husbands weiner and stuck it in a paper bag. then she chucked it in a field. man that was messed. makes yah think once about hookers. and once is all i need. good story thoe i enjoyed it. but animation is a little lax but hell dude i cant wait to see the next one!
Hahaha, awesome, it's great to see everyone's linking the flash to that story. I hadn't even heard of it before making this flash, but after doing some reading (wikipedia is god) I know what you're all on about. Thanks for the criticism and the review, I'll put it to good use!
Well it wasn't bad for a one of your first tries, the art is a little messy and could probably stand a little more attention, but at least you have a hand on the basics. Kudos for having something of a plot going, but it was short and random for not having a story behind it. The panning was nice. You might wanna work on making your animation smoother. Try a few tutorials, I know there are many good ones here on newgrounds, espically for things like backgrounds and effects like rain.
Yeah, I agree on the animation, I need to smooth that out a lot more. The basics are there indeed, I'll just have to increase le skill. Thanks for your criticism!
The story was too short. The sound was horrible. There's no emotions and no direction at all. Back to the drawing board for you...
It's pretty good for a first attempt. The graphics could use work and i would really like to hear some dialog, most people get bored without it. Just facts ya' know? Between the rain and the music i didn't know what to have my volume at. you need to figure out a median between them so one doesn't blow my speakers while i try to hear the music lol. Overall i liked it but you need to work on your proportions with the human anatomy if you are going to do serious flash. I gave a two for humor because i laughed thinking about the case were the guy was cheating on his wife and she did the same thing and threw it out the window while driving. Yea.... but i gave it a decent number since it was a really good start. I can't do anything in flash lol (note: No Submissions) Keep up the work and up your skills and you should go far. I'll watch for more of your stuff.
Hehe, thanks a lot for the constructive criticism. Yeah, I definitely need to work on the sound, it never turns out the way I want it to. You're also right about proportions, but I animated this frame by frame mostly and only used the brush-tool in combi with my mouse. I'm glad you enjoyed it, especially because of the cheating guy story.
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