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Please give me some helpful ideas or anything else you think would help me make this.
Many key oppurtunities missed here.
I guarantee a cult classic flash if you develope the story/plot more. If you will elaborate more, specificly let the viewer know why captain Kirk has been spending so much time probing Uranus and why are there so many klingons there to begin with (slob) ? Don't you see that by divulging details about the personal relationship that you, William Shatner, and Uranus have shared would rocket this story to national fame. When the media exposed the details of the explosive love triangle between you, Captain Kirk, and Uranus plus how the Klingons kept you apart. You could make a fortune on movie rights alone. I hope you take my advice, don't throw away this once in a lifetime oppurtunity. Good luck and Godspeed.
Ok, here's a few suggestions. In the title don't use the same flyby for both the movie and author text. The hard one is don't use bitmaps you found on the internet: draw your own. Put some lip syncing on the Klingon. Don't use speech for some lines and not others, make it all silent or preferably do voices yourself. The whole setup seemed a bit ridiculous to me: two huge spaceships do not stop a coulple of kilometers from on another, think for a bit then open fire while still sitting in the same place. We should see the Enterprise crew discussing the Klingons which they've picked up on the scanners, then possibly a dog fight. Also, I haven't really watched a great deal of Star Trek, but is the Klingon Warship really about the same size as the Enterprise?
Hope those help
Thank you! I didnt think anyone would take the time to give me some help. Those hints help alot. Thanks =]
I love Star Trek!!!!!
Im not a treaky, but I think its ok, a little short.
Didnt really have a storyline or anything.
Anyway one thing I think can be improved is the text.
The green text was hard to read, you could make it learer if it was smaller and its visability was improved.
You could put it in a box or use a better colour or something.
Ya, I agree. Thats a good idea I'm going to do that. Thanks!
It was average, way too short, and the background was just a picture anyone could get from an image search.
On the other hand, it looks like it does have potential. Just make sure you use more works of your own creation and such. I also liked the Enterprise.
I look forward to watching it when it's completed.
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