Score: 5

"I'll be honest..."

by: von-Brunk

date: January 20, 2007

The animation and artwork are very lackluster, however, assuming it's your first cartoon, it's surprisingly better than most peoples' first attempts at Flash. My suggestions would be to avoid choosing ambitious projects for your first submission, because you'll only end up getting frustrated and wasting a possible well written story on a piece of work with terrible graphics and animation.

With your level of skill, I'd recommend doing several small projects first, before trying to make something like this. I can tell you have intentions of creating something decent for Newgrounds, but as of now, your abilities with drawings and animation need to be practiced. Keep trying--I actually gave up with Flash several times before I finally settled down and made good material.

Score: 7

"you done good"

by: greasygemo

date: December 20, 2006

i know you were frustrated making this, and i think making fun of the french is funny. Thank you very much. Its perfectly ok to take at shot at them frogs. I'm a frog, and I laugh with and at us. You should refine your skills, keep the drawings and make another! ll help you mon ami!

Score: 4

"okay"

by: KWAS71KCK

date: December 20, 2006

well, your efforts were nice for a first animation and the drawings were good... but a lot more needed to be done for this one. some colour and audio were very much needed for this one, a bigger explaination or detail to the plot and not just the mirror smashing. those are definitely some things to consider.

Score: 5

"go back an improve this"

by: lman3000

date: December 20, 2006

(srry if i sounde mean i am just trying to help) needs sound, the subtitles blend in with the back ground (not good) and it needs a play button and a reply button, but this is a good flash, u got some skills i will like to see more from u

Lman 3000

Score: 8

"not bad"

by: musakguru

date: December 20, 2006

i like your overall concept, and the animation is beautiful. But i think that you could work on the polt line a little more and mabye state something new, rather than the sterotypes that we all know about. and i also liked the "silent film" aspect you added to it