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Hey Ng-ers this is my fist flash! Vote fairly!
Leave a comment on how i may improve :)
Too short mostly....
This has the beginning of a good storyline, but the use of little balls with eyes isn't going to get you any points. You seem to have spent a lot of time drawing, but if you want this to be really good, you're going to have to make it more than one minute long.
My specific suggestions are:
Improve on the animation a bit--when the ninja turns around, don't make him look like a flipping coin I mean. Make him look like a round ball. Also, sometimes you're going to have to steer away from motion tweens and do some frame-by-frame animation.
When you're using text instead of sound, make sure you can read what the people are saying. Don't put text over the trees, y'know?
When you feel that you're finished, watch your movie critically. People on Newgrounds are more cruel than you are at your worst when viewing your own movies, but don't take any bad reviews personally. Ask yourself, "Would I vote 5 on this movie?"
just needs some improving on the graphics
and to guy above me - haven't you ever seen the three ninjas?
except ninjas are japanese, mongols aren't purple, and it was slow at times. Other wise this was a good flash and I look forward to the improved sequel.
Great first flash
nice, just a few tips. Make the people blobs, the speach writing was hard to read soem times, other then that, nice job
eh it had potential
It was some what interesting at the beginning when you introduced the plot but then i saw the graphics and i was very disapointed. Voice acting over text always helps too. sorry man but i didn't like it that much. 1/5
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