Score: 8
"could have been a bit better"
date: October 31, 2006
there were some animation flaws, such as when you saw the moon in the window while facing the back of the man, it looked as if the moon were on the ground. you wouldnt be able to see the moon at that angle. also when the small black figure went across the window, it went pass the bourder of the window making it seem like it was inside the house, but only for a split second.
i am not going to mark any points for the animation flaws, just wanted to bring them to your attention so that you know what you need improve on in your next flash.
postives-
made the animation flow well with the music. and good choice of music too
the length of the flash was just right. and each scene wasnt too long or too short. it gave the point across.
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negatives-
not much explanation as to what is going on. was he writing a story and what he was seeing was from his story, or was he just dreaming while trying to write something?
could have given a little more explanation as to what was after him. not that anything was wrong with the way you did it, just that there was a little more room for improvement.
the ending wasnt explained. what happened? why did he leave?.
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the flash overall was pretty good. some minor flaws in it, but what movie or flash doesn't have them?
take this flash and look it over. try to improve it. try to fix some animation flaws too. when you are done improving it, just keep it to yourself. do this with every flash you make, or most flashes you make. this way you can improve yourself and become better at making flash videos. you are doing good so far.
Author's Response:
I can't really explain the other stuff, but he didn't leave, it turned out he was dreaming while thinking of an idea.
I apologize for the confusingness.