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Aug 21, 2006 | 9:59 PM EDT
  • Daily 3rd Place August 23, 2006

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Thanks to Tom Fulp for letting me submit this & Frontpage! I appreciate it.

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First and foremost, this is a re-edited version of my last flash movie (This is NOT stolen!). This contains about 40 seconds of new animation, edited scenes, tweaked drawings, etc. Consider this canon, and the last one experimental (if you've seen it). I'm about 95% complete the next episode, so that should be out very soon. If you have any questions, I'll do my best to answer them. I would greatly appreciate it if I get lots of feedback!

Note: All done in flash 5 (I really need to get Flash 8!!)

-If you're not confident about your computer, then set the quality to medium or low-

Reviews


Atom111Atom111

Rated 4 / 5 stars August 28, 2006

its was alright

art and animation was gudd...except da blood...if u fix the sound this cudd have some potential...love da story



daveygraveydaveygravey

Rated 3 / 5 stars August 28, 2006

Nice drawing, but little else to recommend

The worst part was the sound editing - you've faded up and down in the wrong places quite often, making it really difficult to hear dialogue. It is also drowned out quite often by background music and noise. The girl speaks way too quietly.

I also felt there was WAY too much talking here, all expositional dialogue which doesn't really matter. If you have such short time to tell a story, you should establish it and its characters, instead of giving us a bunch of background information which has no context. A good narrative unfolds slowly (like a mystery) instead of just cramming everything home straight away.

The drawing and animation was good, and some of it was excellent. It's such a shame that it was in such a small framed box, I'd loved to have seen it much larger (I'm guessing it was done this way to save memory so it could be longer?)

Overall, it looks good, but it's not strong enough yet for people to want to watch more.



AngoraAngora

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars August 28, 2006

Nice work, but...

It's hard to catch what's happening in that movie. Try to make longer scenes. I had the same problem :)



NCollinsNCollins

Rated 3 / 5 stars August 28, 2006

It was okay.

I felt it jumped needlessly between characters, they got one or two lines and it jumped to the next character. You need to settle, maybe introduce some characters in one part, the rest int he next and so on as they enter the main character's path, then you can split it evenly that way its less confusing, jumpy and weird.

The animation and art i thought was very nice, well done in that regard. Can't wait for the next one.



UndieUndie

Rated 2 / 5 stars August 28, 2006

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Looks and sounds like an 8 year old wrote and made it. Not original or interesting in any way. All in all its an incoherent pile of .. nonsense.