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My third Flash animation, a short cartoon about a caveman who invents the game of bowling. Based on a comic I drew when I was 13. Those of you expecting another sad cartoon from me will be disappointed.
Presented by BadAtom.com
by the prehistoric starring character
------- Horrible hit frames for buttons. I'll assume you now understand the effect of frame 4 ('hit')? I think it should always be a filled shape that is at least slightly larger than the visible graphics. For normal buttons, a rectangle works fairly well.
+++ Fuzziness. Nice effect.
? Is it a low alpha mc of a few frames of noise, produced in Photoshop?
+ I generally like the font you use at the pre-loader.
- Though not the 't'. It looks a bit too straight for that font family. Also, I'm not keen on the 'n'. If you can be bothered, maybe edit it?
++ 1st gag (shape it was) made me smile.
- last gag (end) came as a disappointment. I was actually really rooting for the little caveman and interested in seeing what would happen next.
+++ I do love the title's font.
+++ Great music. Sets the mood perfectly and whilst it's repetitive (kinda suiting the theme well), it doesn't get too dull.
-- I think the ending 'dun' should be maybe replaced with an sfx. I think that'd up the comedy value and might have made me actually enjoy the ending.
-- The bowling arm tween is so obviously lazy. When movement looks more like a typical flash tween than what it represents, I think there's a problem.
- Feet are slightly odd-looking.
+ I do like the face.
-- I don't like the trees in the bg much. Maybe a lusher, slightly darker but more saturated green? Or maybe some texture, maybe shadows/some leaf detail?
+ Cool dino at start.
Enjoyed it. Short and sweet.
Made me smile and I was charmed by the prehistoric starring character.
Re: buttons - I've already been lambasted about the buttons before, I've learned my lesson now. :)
Re: fuzziness - you're right.
Re: ending - I just like dark endings, that's all. I'm a sadist at heart. >:-)
Re: sfx - I wanted to keep it sound-free and let the music carry the story along by itself.
lol great job
Haha I saw you reviewed one of my flashes so i took a look at some of yours... Lol I love this one!!! Its great!!! I could never think of something like that... great job!! A++
You're play button seriously rubs me the wrong way. >_< But this is a cute flash. I liked the joke and the animation ended on a high comedic point that was all you.
A higher frame rate for a short this short would have been appreciated. The movement seemed slow and awkward (especially while his arm was turning) and needed some sense of easing.
The shape tween you used on the bowling ball caught me off guard and made me smile. I've never seen that technique used that way and that grainy effect turned me on. I also enjoyed both the music and the animation. They really complimented each other.
Overall, I have some issues with your play button and your framerate (which comes off as a bit lazy for such a short animation), but other than that, this is a solid animation.
Don't worry, my future Flashes will have more user-friendly buttons. :)
I used 24 fps on this short, but I understand what you mean about the movements. I'll keep trying to improve in that area.
And I'm going to use the grain effect on all my future animations. It's a simple, subtle effect, but it's unique and people will instantly know it's one of my cartoons they're watching. Glad you enjoyed it.
Short but sweet
But a bit short and the graphics weren't good enough to really get away with short
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