A good start

A good start

omg!

put in sound and fix bad grammer make better ending more betterer lol

5

Pros: It has a pretty good plot with a decent concept.

Cons: It has no voices definitely needs this.
The music got on my nerves.
It needs some improvements on the graphics but nothing major.

2/5

Please improve your grammar...

Well done for a second try, drawing wise. Very minimalistic style, not a fan of it, but well done all the same. The animation was also a bit choppy. It could be a bit smoother. There was no speech, which dissapointed me. The songs also did not fit what was happening in the movie. It took very long for something interesting to happen, which puts people off. It's best to start with something attention grabbing, so that watchers do not lose interest in the movie right in the beginning, therefore possibly missing its real potential. What REALLY dissapointed me was the poor grammar. You can do better. Considering you took a month, 3-5 hours a day, it seems you spent most of your time on the animation itself. Work on the grammar more, it increases the quality of the flash. Alot. Right now, it seems a bit...amateur and childish. This REALLY gives off a bad impression. Also, avoid all the "hmmm's" and "ummm's". They, too, give off a childish aura. Well, I gave you a decent score all the same, but next time you attempt a movie, follow some of my hints and tips, they'll really help.

Poor grammar makes little kittens cry.

The movie was boring, and the multiple typos and other grammar mistakes weren't helping your cause. Finish 5th grade english before you submit anything else.