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Originally made for the GTA Collab, which, didn't happen, so I decided to submit it on it's own. That's why it's short. Judge freely. =)
floaty boat yay! ^_^
Continue like this.....
.....and you will become an awesome flash author! the people were well drawn, quite a good puchline but needs more sound, and no "moral to the story" bit. That bit kinda sucked. But the rest was way cool. And make a decent replay button, maybe a firetruck or splash ow water or someting. i wanna see this, really long on the front page by the end of the month! good luck!
It is obvious you have a talent for flash the characters were drawn well and the people walking in the foreground were walking realistically. I will give you some hints to how to make this better:
1) Grass is not just one colour and is not smooth so use different colours and add a texture, also since the bench had shadow should the grass not have it to?
2) I felt that the boat in the background could have been better drawn as it is obvious you can draw better that that
3) In the scene showing the fire truck I felt less detail was added so I would suggest you add tone and shadow
4) Their was no real story line and it was very short which is why it did not get a score that if this was full it would get this is why I had to give it quite a low score. But it is up to you if you want to make it longer or not.
I hope you do not think I am being nasty as you have shown in the future you can make quality pieces of work and I hope that you continue to work as well as you are doing now
Graphics are really pretty good but this really needs a bit more substance. Keep workin' you've got some skills.
Okay, you have talent. You seem to have some pretty smooth animation skills and your graphics were good. I got a little giggle at the end. You should of made it longer though, I understand you were just making a GTA: short. It would of been nice if it would of had a bit of a story too it though.
A starving village ask a water spirit to help them.
Strawberry clock forgets his ticket on the train but maybe he'll be ok
a clock day story
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