Score: 3
"Good graphics, unfortunately the script trashes it"
date: February 28, 2006
The part where it was just the leaf and scenery was pretty.
But the over all execution of the toon gimped a bit. Pretty much the script.
It was out side the box, different but wasnt really funny because a leaf could really never do that.
Another chap I was helping had the same problem. Good animator but bad script writer. He wanted to do something so off the wall that it became sort of stupid.
You need a bit of "realism" when you do a script. Bugs Bunny is so funny because of the basic plot line. Simple and some what realistic. IE hunter hunting rabbits in the forest. Becomes funny because Bugs fights back.
A leaf would never ever do something like this. I think you should have stayed with the beauty theme, you were trying to combine two things.
Have a squirrel play with the kid or such. Then maybe a pretty sunset.
The leaf fight was alright but then when you went to the police and the scientist it tanked.
Maybe just cut it off at baby getting dunked.
Author's Response:
Oh, mate...you wrote a long review. To bad it wasn´t positiv. A overall rating: 3?, come on...Realism...well, maybe I try that some time. To short it down? Perhaps, I think that the police-doctor-part, is less great then the rest. But I wanted a ending. It cant just end with the leaf fighting the baby. I hope I´ll do something in your taste some day. Thanks for the comment...
