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All coments will be consitered, and problems fixed, espicialy the current problems explained by StaringFromTheSun. He makes a very good point.
I WILL BE EDITING THE ARTWORK TO LOOK CARTOON-IER, AND FIXING THE AUDIO EVENTUALY, SO WATCH FOR AN UPDATE. (if you even care that is)
Cool flash... audio credit???
Hey man -- cool flash there, seems like an interesting preview. Cool music, interesting visual style.
Thank you also for crediting my music... however, it doesn't seem like you actually used it in the flash!?!? Very strange.
you have to listen really hard to the background, I made it quiet, so you could hear the voice.
ok here is a list of improvments...
1. The sound was muffled, record it with your mouth farther from the microphone
2. Movement was to slow and so was the transition to different instances, try to speed that up a bit
3. Show more of the "Pursuers"
4. Give a little bit more, we were left with only the information that bad guys are after a child, maybe include the reason why like maybe he saw something he saw that he shouldn't have
5. Who exactly "they" killed
6. Basically 3-5 are suggesting to have more of a plot
I will be sure to watch the future and edied version, good luck.
It's just not that good.
There was only 3 seconds of graphics, and 15 seconds of nothing, ans the sound sounds a little muffled. It needs work. Get a better plot too. I dont mean better as in different, i mean better as in why are they chasing him, whos chasing him ect.
Im on it.
A very promising beginning, if I may say so. The art is of a higher quality than most, and the story appears interesting (of course, there is little data given in the trailer, but that is not unexpected for a trailer). However, be careful not to dwell too long on one shot or scene, especially during high-paced sequences (the shot of the boy running is a tad long). Also, the voice acting could use some work. Other than that, it's off to a good start.
i liek were u heading with this it slike watchign one of them theatre movies about how this persons life messed up and stuff only this feels alot better
A starving village ask a water spirit to help them.
Strawberry clock forgets his ticket on the train but maybe he'll be ok
a clock day story
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