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Its finnaly finished, 1085 frames long. hope you enjoy it....
just been updated smaller size and better ending.
overall not bad.
try to base your animations on tweening a little more, and you could do great stuff!
not too bad, but a lot more is needed to make this one better. maybe you should check out some of the tutorials on NG to give you a hand in it.
Needs some work
I liked where you were going with the line idea, but it wasn't quite enough to impress me. I think a few changes you should make would be:
1) Get rid of the fighting and concentrate on the main guy dodging the lines or finding ways to survive.
2) Draw an actual figure instead of stick figure.. or find a clever way to do the stick figure.
3) Change the background to something that seems to fit better. If you're going to stick with stick figures, I'd suggest doing everything else in the movie as minimalistic as possible. I'd almost prefer a plain white backdrop than the bricks.
4) If you're going to use someone's music without permission, at least give them credit for the song somewhere and state that its used without permission. How would you like it if someone took your art and mixed it in with something you might not want to be affiliated with? I'm not saying don't use the music... I'll probably be using copyrighted music in my movies whenever I'm ready to start publishing, but at least give credit where credit is due. Its the unspoken agreement between artists.
Hope you don't take offense, as this is all just some constructive criticism. :)
Thanks for voting, crazeyal!
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You needed work on the ending, And it's an UPDATED one??? yeesh.
Movies are either jokes or stories. You didn't provide a "why" for the movie, so you needed a punchline or a twist. It just stopped. It's not bad for a beginner, but you have to think from the perspective of the viewer. The use of the lines was original and sometimes entertaining, but you needed a faster pace, more surprises, some spfx, or at least some semblance of plot and/or characters.
um, can you say "waste of time"? enough with the stick figure flashes in the portal. none of them really stand out.
Blue Pencilmate meets Red Pencilmate, but things don't go so well...
While taking the day off work, Lloyd and Glynis take in a movie
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