nice!
Damn, this sounds a lot like me and my friends making recordings at 1-2 in the morning. funny and good.
Author Comments
Keep in mind that this was my very first flashtoon, graphics suck, and there is some paper rustle in the audio. We spent only a few hours on this but have learned a lot fom it.
alright
some paperbag dude telling a story. I guess this has never been done before. The voice acting could have been better... but it isn't bad. "i'm in it for the bitches" hahah. I really like the lined paper background. As this movie went on it got better. Definitely kept me interested. I like the timberlake impression and the alien ship. very nice stuff.
Oneity-EightThree responds:
I think the voice could have been better too, we started it late at night and finished it 7 hours later so we we're kind of tired. We've gotten better with that...
Could become a pretty cool series
Well this looked quite promising. Maybe it'll become a pretty popular series in the future. You submitted episode 2 before this one, right? Would be better if you submitted this one first, but meh who cares? Anyway, here are a couple of suggestions that might make this a bit better.
One: You should add some subtitles. I could hear Bag Boy pretty good, but I could barely hear what Justin was saying. Just make some kinda box where the text is so that it's not diffecult to read or something like that. Two: You need to work a bit on the graphics. They were kinda average and if you want this to get a very high score, you have to draw better. Three: Well there wasn't really that much going on in this episode. In my opinion, it was a little bit boring. I hope the next episodes will be a bit more interesting and a bit longer.
Overall I'd give this 5 out of 10, 2 out of 5. It was a kinda average movie, but it was pretty original I think. I haven't seen anything like this before actually. I hope you'll improve on your drawings and that more stuff will happen in future episodes. It could become a pretty cool series like I said before. So put a bit more work in it and good luck with making all the other episodes.
~Auz
Oneity-EightThree responds:
Yes we did submit ep2 before this one. We thought it to be better, but I like the simplicity of this one so I decided to add it aswell. We have three future Bag Boy scripts written already, and I'm ordering one of those Wacom drawing tablets so we'll be stepping up a bit in the near future. Thank you for the pointers, we'll be sure to consider what you've said when we work on episode 3.
Original sketches
I am only blamming you because of technical reasons, but I have to say that this character is an original. Dont give up on this one, just get better at flash and I know this character will be great!
So just get better!
Oneity-EightThree responds:
Can you be more specifc on technical reasons so we can improve on future episodes (or even revisitng this one).
Truly a below sub-par flash work.
THe sound was off, there was no lip synch at all, and the alien was distracting. Seriously though, I know you can do better, so come back with it once you've worked on it more... till then, I'm blamming this version.
Oneity-EightThree responds:
I don't mean to be rude or anything but in my defense the audio is fine. I have tested it on about 3 pc's and everything matches up perfectly, maybe your computer was just going through some heavy processing at the time... It happens, anywho, thank you for being honest.