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This submission follows the epic story of a young hero in his early stages of training. It's quite amusing.
I am coming to terms with layers, key frames, and motion tweening - the sequal shall surpass its predecessor! Feel free to leave constructive reviews. Enjoy~
Time spent: 6 days (of hard work)
Total layers: 16
Total frames: 2160
Frame rate: 20 fps
Tired story line, handwriting difficult to read, drawing difficult to discern, not funny or scary or even very entertaining. I am not going to hold my breath for the next installment, but maybe next installment will thrill me & I will eat these words.
6 days hard work?
maybe you should work a little harder. there are inconsistencies in your drawing, you have bad spelling and need to work on a plot a bit more. Try spending a month on an animation and see what you produce.
Hmm. Ok, I will be more critical with my spelling the day you deliver a review rating within reasonable grounds. However, your comments are feasible - The predecessor will be a much lengthier project. That is all
((( COOL )))
Wow great style, i like how well it looks in this animation, and the way you have animated the fighting was pretty cool. The music was clear, and that was good. The graphics are ok, but your blood looks a bit off, maybe next time you could work on that, it still looks ok though. The story was interesting so far, and i hope to see the rest soon...
Awesome, a constructive review from NG's #1 reviewer. I'm flattered with your insightful comments! I did my best with different visual perspectives and expect them to be more dramatic in the next.
I shall pay vigilant attention to blood details & margins in the foreseeable future - and I will work hard towards a really polished storyline (but will also require patience and time well spent), indeed.
Thankyou for ur kind words
Poor drawing, but there is potential here
If you continue this series, you're going to have to write on hell of a good story to keep people interested in the face of painful drawing. You did manage some fairly cinematic camera work, that helped a lot.
So far, all we have is our seemingly stereotypical hero getting the stuffing beat out of him, then deciding he's fed up. You could easily make this just like every other story that starts like this, but lets hope not.
Yes, I agree that the storyline will be a very significant component in the next series development - along with improvements in visuals and graphics. As I have mentioned, patience will be a foundation I will build upon; that is, until I have conjured and put forth an original plot for all audiences!
But at the moment, I think the second episode will further reinforce our hero's origins & introductions - just to add abit of depth and leeway.
Thankyou for your constructive review mister
I love it...
I love how you executed some good cinematic concepts, with bad graphics(just you know, freehand Flash drawing). I like it alot, and I'm interested in the next one. Anyway this gives graphic designers hope in creating serious movies.
Thanks for warmly acknowledging the cinematic point of view I was attempting to convey in this flash piece. I hope future viewers will venture beyond the cliche' storyline I presented, and appreciate the atmosphere I was trying to channel to the audience in this submission.
Good luck in your flash works as well, my friend. Thanks again for an encouraging review! XD
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