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Who is this Tyler fag below me? Giving critiques on a 13 year old video is pointless, the user is now in his 30s probably, hasn't signed in since 2001 most likely. Get a real job son.
The text was nice and easy to read, in good clear font and was big enough across the screen for the viewer to read with ease. It stayed for a good length of time and the dialogue was well written making me think it would have been a very good spooky opening to an actual flash movie. Some good potential.
The plot? Is there a point? No, apparently there isn't. At the end it gives me the option to click something but it doesn't bring anything up, not even a stupid ad or anything. So in that case there is no storyline at all, and the images you used in the background for this entire flash were either way to zoomed in to see or just plain blurry. The timing was much to short to be anything of interest to the viewer, and if it could have been well, it ruined that by ending abruptly. The voice was hard to understand so there was no point in listening to it and it was more annoying than stupid. I think it's main point was to be spooky at least a little bit, but it completely failed without a single plot of any kind.
This had quite the good potential but there's absolutely no point to it, it's just some random text being spoken by an annoying voice about apparently being "evil". Some nice effort I suppose.
A mix of weird backgrounds with nonsense cliched "evil" text over it. Not much to see at all. Utter pointlessness.
the sound was edited well and the backgrounds and imagery were matching
but in a nutshell its just some shitty poetry
Could've been scary if done right
I do like the creepy music and surreal backgrounds in all this but the voice and text could use a LOT of work it sounds like a 14 years old kid was doing it and just learned how to use those voice altering programs. But yeah good concept but just needs a little bit of work
A look at the first day of Lucina in Super Smash
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