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fighting male + female. tight movie, vote.
Needs some fixing up.
Well first off i thought this was way too short, you need to add much more content, more chacahters and much more color aswell as better visuals, and second you should probably ad a "STOP-ACTION-CODE" so those are the main things that need some work as for the animation itself, its notbad of an idea, kinda cute if you ask me and you have a good idea but like i said the visuals could be better, and more detail in the characters and effects aswell, so really this is ok but needs much more effort and detail on the animation, some ideas to improve on would be instead of the "LINES" as characters give them more full body types and have them animated abit smoother it seemed choppy at times, making it longer with other scenes other characters and much more use of color will also help, these are just a few ideas that could improve on this, try them out and see what you come up with.. but like i said it needs lots of ideas and improving, wont hurt to try.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
So i mentioned a few things to improve on, I would suggest to improve on the flash short you could add more shorts and put them all on one flash instead of just the one, but having alot in one flash would make it more entertaining, and make the flash longer with more to see, So more is needed, if not making it a short, make it filled with much more then you have, this movie "LOOPS" now thats actually an easy fix, you can use a stop-action-code from the action - script and there are actually lots of easy to understand tutorials here on the site to view on how this is done if you dont know, but anyways the stop-action-code will stop the looping, but dont forget to add some "PLAY" and "REPLAY" buttons for the viewers to restart viwing the flash, so these are just a few tips on improving on this i hope its helpful for your next creation.
A very short flash but can be improved, kinda funny idea i liked, of what was there.
animation was okay, but drawing was terrible, almost to the point of being funny, almost, but not quite. nice try though I guess. Next time, if there is a next time, focus on drawing and sound.
The start was alright, the rest sucked
I started watching this and I was surprised by the fact that it seemed alright, but then you made a stupid fart joke which wasn't funny, fart jokes never were and never will be, then you had the guy beat up the woman, I wasn't impressed at all, it was just stupid and unfunny, a complete waste of my time.
Pointless things tend to suck...
Just like this did. Do some thing with an actual point and actually make the words look like they are being said by the characters, not just words that appear out of nowhere.
That was horrible!
Blue Pencilmate meets Red Pencilmate, but things don't go so well...
While taking the day off work, Lloyd and Glynis take in a movie
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