Ok, hi to all. This is basically the one scene from hopefully what will become my first proper flash movie. I would like to say, i've been working on this for some time and any similarities to the previous entry yesterday with a similar name are coincidental. lol
If you could please review and give some suggestions for improvement for the final thing, it'd be much appriecated. Hopefully the full movie will be much improved on. Ok, well enjoy. Or not....:S
Not very good.
Even though this was a trailer, If you call it "Outtakes", I think there should be more than one. The one you did show I didn't find very funny. This should be in the Alphas.
Also, try to make the text fit into the speech bubbles a bit better, sometimes it touched the edges.
It was alright but
If you were to finish this in a full movie, slow the text down a bit, it was going way too fast, but other then that, not bad, pretty good.
Pretty good, very nice for sprite work!
Now for my 500th review!
*drum roll*
ok, well I thought this was a very good promo for this flash! You are a great sprite artist! I like the fact that you have pretty good sound and such, the graphics were pretty good also. You could imrpove by your stupid loading bar upgraded to a much better one. Also try and clarify your pictures, they are a little blury and such, other than taht it was ok. This was pretty humerous as well is it was supposed to be, good work, I will look forward to more of your submissions in the future! Hopefully you can brush up on nearly everything, do a few run throughs before submitting to newgrounds! Best of luck on your future flashes, and congradulations on this passing the very tough grading flash portal! I gave you a three out of five on the portal voting and a six out of ten on the overall voting for the review! Keep it up, your a quality flash artist, especially with sprites!
-Jamie
Thank you for your kind words and encouragement. I'll definately try and improve on picture quality and all the other suggestions you and the others have mentioned. Hopefully my final piece will be just as good, though hopefully better. Thanks again!
Not bad
I think that for a sprite movie it was pretty well done.
What i liked is how it was set up like a 'movie production', and i think the key to making it funny, at least in my view, is to expand on the 'production errors'. Say, Sonic accidently takes out tails instead of the enemy, or (like your idea with kirby n mario) have
the guest stars mess up the battles :). Basically-- have some jokes on 'accidents' in the scenes, rather than humor from farts( as it seems like people weren't too happy with that part)
All in all, I think you did a good job from what I've seen, sound, animation, etc. , as it all blended together well. Keep on workin! :P
Snickerzes
Well that appealed to the kid in me. Lookit Tails trying to hold on to that tree! XD