Score: 5
"I'll have to admit:"
date: September 4, 2005
You know how to do presentation, because no ordinary person could use images and colors in such a random fashion so easily, however, I'm not here to give you 5's and 10's based on pretty colors.
The story was non-existant, and the interactivity portion of this was un-needed and only helped to confuse me further. There's no progression, or seeming point, to this entire work. The art looked pretty good, since it wasn't animated much, i'd assume more detail on the characters. The music was alright, although kill bill, and other cliche's take away from your originality.
The voice(s) for this work were not the best. Popping, static, and many times, unable to hit the right tone or mood really hurt this project as well. As a voice actor, I can tell you that voices are most important for establishing good characters and for also bringing the story to life.
Please, PLEASE!!!! work on your story. The randomness and the looks feel great, but what point will it have if it doesn't have a compelling story to make us wonder why and who? Get attached to the characters and want to see more and more because of what will happen next, not 'how will it look?'.
Overall, this is a neat piece that obviously isn't ameture, but it's far from anything I would consider worth-while (in the sense of a great flash) when drawn out over many episodes.
You're on the right track, so keep it up! (I think you had some stuff about voices in your stuff too) Like I said, it looks great, but you need to work hard on all areas. And get rid of that interactivity... it really added nothing to the story that was non-existant. Good attempt at a .hack take, but really, it doesn't work well (without a story behind it!)
best of luck!
Author's Response:
Old problems are allways worth a second glance, thanks for brining them to my attention once again. Before the reproduction of this project began - a vow was uttered to exterminate these problems once and for all...