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Homage to Nadine Gordimer's short story, Terminal.
((( OK )))
Nice storry and kinda funny with the end, characters are ok nice close ups, the characters could use some more detailing like more shading and stuff, the text sliding across the screen was cool but streamed abit slow, good flash keep at it...
5 at max
i give it a 5 cause u never used actual voices ur head nodding looked corny ur leeching of other ppls books and so wat ur doing an english course get over it u choose it stop submitting old flash movies its really awkward i mean its not like we learn enough about this crap in school
This "crap?" If you think all you're learning about is crap, then I think you still have a lot of learning to do, sir. The reasons I did not use voices is because the characters no longer needed to speak to one another. Their bond was so tight that they knew what the other was thinking, just by sharing a glance. Also, I can't do girl voices well.
not bad, i think it could've done better if it was a little longer, but it was still alright.
Sometimes less is better
That was simple, and good. See it can still be done.
35% more noodle
Homage to Nadine Gordimer? That seemed to be more of an homage to vaseline-on-the-lens soap operatics, but maybe I'm wrong.
This seemed WAY heavy-handed. It's hard to for the viewer to come to any sort of natural, poignant reaction while they are being bashed over the head with an aluminum bat that says "TERMINAL ILLNESS IS SAD! LOVING RELATIONSHIPS ARE TOUCHING! COMBINE THEM, AND WHAT DO YOU GET?! FEEL THE EMOTION!"
Try a little subtlety. May I suggest watching "Ready's Voyage" (if you haven't already)? That movie manages to be incredibly effective without one word of dialogue or title. I'm not saying you shouldn't have words, but it might be a good reference.
An alternate "homage": Don DeLillo's novel, "White Noise." If you put more into the decision between regular condensed soup and 35% more noodle, you'd have something there. It's all about the grocery stores...and generic products! It's how they arrange the aisles!!!
OK, lastly, what's with the Journey song? "They say that the road is no place to start a family..." The characters in this movie hardly seemed like touring band members playing for adoring fans all over the country, but feeling so lonely inside. But, one time I watched "Journey: Behind the Music," and this terminally ill kid's wish was to meet Journey, so they did! And the kid was really happy about it!
ANYWAY YOU WANT IT!
JUST A SMALL TOWN GIRL, LIVING IN A LOOOOONELY WOR-ERLD
I used that song because of the lyrics "You stand by me... I'm forever your's... Faithfully." Trust me, I spent about four solid hours trying song after song and that one, in my opinion, worked best. Others that came close to being used were "Open Arms" by Journey, "End It On This" by No Doubt, "Still In Love" by Nick Cave and the Bad Seeds", and "Sweeter Than Me" by Aaron Sprinkle. Thanks for the review.
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