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PLEASE review! I need to know exactly what to improve on so the saga will be the greatest. I'm an Intermediate flash artist so be reasonable.
here's my 2 Cent:
First of all, Improve integrated Sounds, as the Rain effect was O.k, but the Repetition left a small soundless Gap which was y'know not so well.Graphics aswell have to be a "bit" better. You don't have to change your Style, just give 'em Movement.Those Characters Holding still don't seem to be very alive, sorry.
The Story itself is interesting,Lone Wolf with a past Defeat :)
Don't give up, ignore those "omfg blamthisUsuxIR1337unot" ppl, for most of them don't even HAVE a Flash Kit ;P
Greetings and best Wishes,
peice od shi#!
what the hell was that, there was nothing!! and the stick people didnt help much
Um, sorry, but thiswasn't good. At all.
Okay. First of all, don't make stick Star Wars films. You need to draw characters. And put some of your nice perspective stuff in there next time.
Needs much work
The graphics weren't so great, but the sound was alright. The story line looks good for now, but didn't you already submit this once? I think you did, maybe you should not do that until you finish it.
Hmmm... not bad.
Nothing really stands out in my mind for improvement, other than to continue with it and make it longer. Thought I think the 25 years ago at the beginning can be left out unless you want to start off with anouther scene. If that is your opening scene, take it off and just leave the 25 years later afterwords. And you should think about making the red guy more sinister, Give him a cape or something.
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While taking the day off work, Lloyd and Glynis take in a movie
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