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This is my first Flash movie, so I need some feedback !¡ The plot is up to you !
With work you could do stuff worth a 10
Good art, good style, needs to be longer, and you need to work on plot development.
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Okay, basically, put a lot of detail into works, or if not put detail, make sure you make the plot and story worth watching. Make them longer, and dont make everything black or a different color. Change it up, make characters colorful (but accurately) and think of good plot lines and stories that you could do flashes about.
it wasnt too good in my opinion. it didnt make to much sense and it was kinda dumb
sorry for such a bad reveiw
Wow this is the worst reveiw i've ever given hehe i always give lovely marks but I know this is your first flash so i'll be gentle. It lacked a lot!! You really needed better graphics, just more to look at other than black and the few hints of color! Second maybe put some dialog because if you lack facial expression you really need something for the veiwer to connect with (^_^) the best part in the whole flash was at the end with that little bloody hand print i thought that was hilarious but other than that it just needed more ok but good job though!!
Very Stlylized and good work.
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