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This is my first Flash movie, so I need some feedback !¡ The plot is up to you !
the music is boring...
and the animation isn't that good...
a few people walking around shooting each other with guns is not cool;
what makes the film cool is how one presents it and the idea itself.
if one has a boring idea, no matter how well one presents it, the film is still weak.
there is no need to repeat the gun shot at the killer's car, at the building again, and at the killing scene again.
the killer is not assassinating some kind of VIP or something in public, then one needs to repeat the gun shot.
For the repeating idea is to create tension, to uprise the drama,
for example, the president was shot on stage while his speech, then repeat the gun shot at the crowd, repeat the gun shot at houses where families gather to watch the speech, then, repeat the gun shot at the stage where the president gave his speech. At the end, blood slowly ooze out, the president is down. Now the crowd can scream and panic.
The "repeating stuff" is not to show off that no one cares about the victim or how cool one get's shot, IT'S DESIGN FOR CREATING TENSION !!!!!!
Good point! Shoot to kill! YOU Could animate a bit moar though.
nice clean simple graphics, nice smooth animation, and the music you chose fit the flash very well, good job on this, its very strong from a graphic arts standpoint, and it was very fun to watch as well.
you dont have to be an amature
i think somone should always go as hard as they possibly can in anything they do if you were exerienced i would give this video a 4 because i really like the idea. but i did not like the actual video.although i do see potential
Great first try
Pretty good, but you could tweak it a wee bit
A short film about a park bench
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