Good for a first.

That was actually pretty good for a first. I don't think that there is too much reading really, all you need is to add animation, sound effects, a tad less repeditive (sp?) music and touch up on the "humor" a little bit and it will be fine.

geez, this sucked!

damn, this sucked! i dont give a shit if it was your first submission, it was one of the worst things on here. at least try to make it good. it seems like you made this while you were half asleep.

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Alright for a first time, but get some animation into it.

we love you doctor connoly but we dont want u as

our child. i laughed cos it was bad

Try better next time

The movie would be better with moving images and voices and sound. The graphics could also be better.