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Score: 7

"A little short..."

by: Coop83

date: December 6, 2008

Not a bad piece - it really has got some great potential, which revolves around the poignancy of the situation, though I would have certainly appreciated it being a good few minutes longer, you can then take the situation a lot further.

Certainly a good start and with a start like that, it has a lot of potential for greatness.

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Score: 7

"Sad"

by: Haggard

date: December 1, 2008

The graphics aren't that good to be honest. The guy seems to be a "Cynaide & Happiness" styled character like one can see just everywhere around the internet nowadays. Ok, it's better than just stickmen, but I think it would be better if you'd try to create your own style.

I also would like to see some more story in the flash itself, but in your author comments you said you where just looking for something to animate to, so I guess you didn't have a real story in mind but did it just for the sake of animating.
Well, if that's the case then it turned out pretty well.

I like the background you used. It works much better than a simple white background. It also separates the character from the other stuff in the background a bit, creating the impression that he feels (and propably is?) left alone and, well, broken.

The animations could use some work, though. It looked quite strange when the guy walked and also the raindrops looked a bit strange. It's very noticeable when the "rain loop" starts over again.

Overall, it's a very sad flash that could use some more work.

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Score: 7

"Not bad at all."

by: Fro

date: November 30, 2008

I struggled between a 6 and a 7, but I feel like giving it a 7. =P

Animation/Graphics - The drawing style that you have is interesting. It's very simple, but yet it gets the job done. Sometimes simple is all that you needed in this flash I think the simple drawings and animation was good enough. Great sad colors and everything. The plain background gives you the feeling of emptiness, which I think you were going for with it. The walking style made me smile a little bit, but again it was an interesting style of animation.

Story/Content - I think you could have improved this by a lot. I get what you are trying to do by showing the sadness and everything, but it's a little too short content wise. I think you should have added more things that went by in the backgrounds such as sad memories that he had or things like a couple holding hands, which just makes his sadness/loneliness even deeper than it was before.

Audio - Maybe a few more sounds effects, but that would come with adding more content to the flash if you so choose to. I think that the song that you chose was a very good one and I might have to stop by the audio portal and review it sometime. It really set the mood for the flash.

Overall - I think it was pretty good, but it would be really good if you added more content to it. Not only does this make it longer, but it can really add to the sadness of the submission and everything.

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Score: 10

"<3 <3"

by: nubbinownz

date: November 23, 2008

Thank you very much for this, It really made my night.

The ending definitely picked it up again haha. This is wonderful. 5/5 10/10 the whole shibang

Score: 8

"I don't get the message, but great artwork."

by: MrCamba

date: November 23, 2008

So yeah, the art in this was pretty great, and the music really sets in the mood of the flash. But, i don't understand the theme or message you are trying to tell us. So a little info would be nice.

P.S: I like how you didn't respond to the guy below me yet.

Score: 1

"Man, wtf is this shit?"

by: DeInfierno

date: November 22, 2008

It's ok to be artsy-fartsy, but this is just dumb. Martin Scorsese would commit suicide if he saw this. Where's the story? Even something as short as this can have a story. Even photographs have stories. The animation wasn't all that fabulous either. The legs looked pretty weird. That's not really important though. I think you should come up with a story before you animate something.

Score: 9

"Not bad, just one suggestion re: the end"

by: AlDBarron

date: November 22, 2008

I liked it, think it's worth keeping, but I do think at the end when the guy had the can thrown at his head & you could faintly hear someone yelling in the background - that could probably stand to be cleared up a bit to make it easier to understand what exactly happened and what was said (unless they were supposed to be speaking gibberish - it might even have been actual speech, I'm a bit hard of hearing in certain frequencies so if it was and I just couldn't tell, then never mind that part of it).

But in any case, very good choice of imagery and style to go with the music, and it was synced well. Looking forward to more! :-)

Score: 8

"Well"

by: speedsonikku

date: November 22, 2008

Nice animation...
Perfect song
Now, make this longer, and with a bit of more sense ok?
You've got a nice material here

Score: 7

"Not bad..."

by: NikolaosTheDark

date: November 22, 2008

I don't know if this was what you were aiming for but the "Stupid hobo!" ending was a humor arrow piercing the canvas of drama, which really gave the quality a boost.