Score: 7
"good..."
date: October 20, 2007
pretty good with the drawing, but need more emphasis on the animation... i know its a bitch, but you need more frame by frame stuff in it to make it better...
and as for the beginning "script", you gotta work on making it sound not so corny..a good way to do it is to use a bunch of words that nobody knows the meaning of but still sound cool... "something brighter then the sun" just doesn't cut it.... neither does "dragon of death"... sounds like some final fantasy ten year old fan came up with it...
a good example of big words i would take from outwar... they had a dungeon called the "Dungeon of eternal shadow forgotten reliquery"... no idea wtf thier talkn about but it sounds cool...
October 20, 2007
Author's Response:
Your comment is just and fair, and constructive as well and I thank you for that. Within the series there are numerous recalls to the names "orb of light" and "dragon of death", but once learned about by the main character, they will have actual names and more dramatic titles. Also you will notice that at the beginning it says "orb of life", but in the title it says "orb of Light". This wasn't a mistake but two names given to be referred to throughout the series. But there is a major twist to everything that will make it all clear. Thank you for your comment.