Score: 10
"(title in work)"
date: November 10, 2007
^^Good Points^^
Hehe, I thought it was pretty brilliant. Loved the sound effect that you used. Could you tell me where you got it if you ever read this? I guess how quick this ended was pretty unexpected, but still was funny.
^^Needs Improving^^
Well, it is rather short. Could have had something else to it that would actually make a storyline.
March 11, 2008
Author's Response:
All the audio was ripped by me from a website that sells stock music like this, that pop sound was just found on a site like findsounds.com