Score: 8
"Cool!"
date: September 24, 2007
Nice plot you have going there! But int he beginning, you said "geographers and I"... but it sounds like it was supposed to be about the people after the text. A nice way to improve would be to check for spelling errors and grammatical errors, as lame as that sounds. It's kinda awkward and ruins the seriousness for me though. XD Nice job though. I'm interested to find out what happens. ALso, I thought the characters would've been more concerned about the thief that he knocked out of his way. Work on the reactions that each person might have at a given time. Alright, I'm done being nitpicky.