Score: 7
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date: April 16, 2008
That was great.
But ... I hate to sound like a cock - I've literally just signed up to review this, it's clearly been on here for a while so you're done with tweaking it and who the feck am I to pass judgement on a piece of work that was only meant for class anyway, etc - but I do have a slight problem. Where the hell does her head go? There isn't enough of an establishing movement to say that it's disappeared inside her torso or it became the tentacle, so I assume it just popped off. But then it would make so much more sense as a piece if it just plopped onto the floor or something.
Egh. I know it's only a school assignment, but what's the point of sites like this if a little bit of con. crit doesn't come your way every now and again?
Other than that, your sense of weighting is really spot on. Love the way she 'lollops' about on screen. Great little line test. Would love to see more of this kind of stuff.