Score: 8
"Well, we meet again, I see..."
date: November 9, 2004
You sir, are very dexterous, directorially speaking. Although certain aspects of your visual presentation are somewhat underdeveloped, I perceived such shortcomings only peripherally. In the interests of objective critique, I am compelled to note the slightly crude nature in which the drawings and the animations are conceived. However, and this is an emphatic “however”, I do not believe that this infringes upon the general essence or quality of the piece.
Very much akin to “Hiroshima”, you once again reassert your command of atmosphere and aura. You accomplish this in a number of ways. Your pacing, your choice of musical accompaniment, your color schemes, and your transitions amalgamate into a rather effective conduit for the presentation of your themes. As the flash approaches its climax, the music, the pace, and the scenery become increasingly more unpredictable and hectic, perhaps reflecting the entropy and chaos that marked the final plight of Gatsby. You (and Fitzgerald, for that matter) seem to advance forth a thematic paradox— whereas money is generally regarded as the manifestation of control, it ostensibly fueled the torrential procession toward degeneracy and loss of control within the story. I though your flash incorporated and represented this notion very well.
This skill of yours is difficult to develop. It is, however, inherent to your enterprise. Exploit it. Nevertheless, although I do realize that this is a school project, I would like to see you progress in your aesthetic and visual sophistication. That would certainly expedite the awesomeness of your work. There, was that constructive enough?
Cheers
Author's Response:
Heylo,
That was a very constructive review. Your through understanding and very well written and articulate review was outstanding! I have never had a review like that so hats off to you.
Its understandable my movie is underdeveloped, I rushed a few scenes but I think I got the point proven. I have been practicing and for my next movie, I have fully story boarded it so is more developed and sofisticated. Althoung my next movie is another school project, it has more work put into it and less tweens and more frame by frame animation. I hope our paths cross agian and I would highly enjoy another chance to read your wise words of review. Thank you and God bless.