Score: 3
"Better than #1, definitely."
date: October 11, 2004
him getting pressurised into playing football was mildly amusing and did at least raise a smile.
You're definitely improving, but it all still seems to have spilled straight out of your head without any proper planning or polish.
Graphics still needs major work.
Some of the static images look vaguely OK, but not when moving.
This could have been shortened significantly whilst retaining the few decent jokes, cutting out the chaff. Would have made it better.
Author's Response:
him getting pressurised into playing football was mildly amusing and did at least raise a smile.
You're definitely improving, but it all still seems to have spilled straight out of your head without any proper planning or polish.
Graphics still needs major work.
Some of the static images look vaguely OK, but not when moving.
This could have been shortened significantly whilst retaining the few decent jokes, cutting out the chaff. Would have made it better.