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ya no. what i meant was (sry if i confused you), the part coming up when i get to the part with the lazer is obvious. in fact, you should be able to tell where the lazer is coming from just from the words the little girl says.

At 12/27/08 09:56 AM, theactionscripter wrote: I had to do things from scratch again LOTSA IMPROVEMENTS!

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/3908/358 06_eech.php

ya uh.....llike ubercream said, try to have some storyline in it. don't just go for the funny cuz it's random factor, as it's not random enough to be funny. at least mine has a storyline. girl asks for drawing, guys draws, girl gets blllaaaauaugghed by drawing, shit happens.

At 12/27/08 09:56 AM, theactionscripter wrote: I had to do things from scratch again LOTSA IMPROVEMENTS!

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/3908/358 06_eech.php

Tbh didnt really see how that worked.. ball goes bleughhhhh.. not particularly funny.
I'd say go away for a little bit and brainstorm a situation where the lazer could happen out of nowhere and try again.
And dont bring attention to the fact i havent shown a part yet, im just commenting. :)

At 12/27/08 01:58 PM, satan112 wrote: And dont bring attention to the fact i havent shown a part yet, im just commenting. :)

GASP! you didn't do a part? MAKE ONE UP RIGHT NOW!

At 12/27/08 09:56 AM, theactionscripter wrote: I had to do things from scratch again LOTSA IMPROVEMENTS!

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/3908/358 06_eech.php

Okay, it's a little better, but still not good. Make the guy have a reason to go to the "No trespassing" area. For example, you can have another guy say "Hey, I dare you to trespass where it clearly says 'no trespassing.'" Instead of a ball, make it something else that enters the scene differently in instead of just flying in lazily. For example, it could be a police officer who comes in because the kid is tresspassing.

Okay, now we need something funny. If you want, the cop could beat the shit out of the kid. Laying on the floor, all bloody, the kid could spring up, turn into a giant robot or something and then fire a lazer out of his ass that propells him, really fast, through the air...

Just a thought.

ya somewhat good idea, but would he be able to pull it off and make it look good? would any of us be able to? well maybe some of us..

I got a xbox 360 guys. yay

Is it too late to join?

I already have a basic I idea of what I'm doing.

Here's my preview
http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/3908/835 78_madnessdude67_lazorcollab.php
Here's my fla.
http://uploading.com/files/S35R24O5/madn essdude67_laser collab.fla.html

At 12/27/08 11:19 PM, Madnessdude67 wrote: Here's my preview
http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/3908/835 78_madnessdude67_lazorcollab.php
Here's my fla.
http://uploading.com/files/S35R24O5/madn essdude67_laser collab.fla.html

okay ur animating skills are better than theactionscripter, but ur still going with that mentality of random, but not random so much as funny, random as much as stupid.

At 12/27/08 11:19 PM, Madnessdude67 wrote: Here's my preview
http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/3908/835 78_madnessdude67_lazorcollab.php
Here's my fla.
http://uploading.com/files/S35R24O5/madn essdude67_laser collab.fla.html

Everything was poorly drawn, the only movement was in the guy's eyes, the lazer face had reeeeally big lips, nothing happened, it wasn't funny, it was very predictable, there was no story, and you made my mom cry.

:(

little bit of an update here, im updating as im going along so people can help me fix things before its too late. by the way, yes i will fix his drawing arms. they are horrible

here it is!

At 12/29/08 11:49 PM, fluffkomix wrote: little bit of an update here, im updating as im going along so people can help me fix things before its too late. by the way, yes i will fix his drawing arms. they are horrible

here it is!

Woah wait, you made that girl voice in Audacity? If so, you're really good at voicing the 'girly' accent!

At 12/29/08 11:49 PM, fluffkomix wrote: little bit of an update here, im updating as im going along so people can help me fix things before its too late. by the way, yes i will fix his drawing arms. they are horrible

here it is!

Sry for the double post, but some shading wouldn't kill. (I presumed you were going to add a background)

At 12/29/08 11:49 PM, fluffkomix wrote: little bit of an update here, im updating as im going along so people can help me fix things before its too late. by the way, yes i will fix his drawing arms. they are horrible

here it is!

1. he shows the pic of a shoop
2. girl gets shot
3. ????
4. profit!

At 12/30/08 01:37 AM, Nutcasenightmare wrote: Woah wait, you made that girl voice in Audacity? If so, you're really good at voicing the 'girly' accent!

no i previously made one in audacity but then had a outside voice actor do a voice for me

At 12/30/08 09:57 AM, Keveta2 wrote: 1. he shows the pic of a shoop
2. girl gets shot
3. ????
4. profit!

im hoping to have the profit somewhere in the beginning. more like:

1. profit
2. corporate sponsorship
3. advertisements, big hype
4. animation
5. disappointment.

At 12/29/08 11:49 PM, fluffkomix wrote: little bit of an update here, im updating as im going along so people can help me fix things before its too late. by the way, yes i will fix his drawing arms. they are horrible

here it is!

awesome, really like it.
smooth, well animated and well voiced and synced!
thats the sort of level of work that people should meet..
*hopes i will too..*

At 12/30/08 08:40 PM, satan112 wrote: awesome, really like it.
smooth, well animated and well voiced and synced!
thats the sort of level of work that people should meet..
*hopes i will too..*

why thank you. please dont look at my other work as that is shit compared to this, even tho this isnt completed. ya i actually worked hard on this, unlike my other flashes which i never completed or were dished out in a minimal amount of time.

still like them tho.

At 12/30/08 08:46 PM, fluffkomix wrote:

At 12/30/08 08:40 PM, satan112 wrote: awesome, really like it.
smooth, well animated and well voiced and synced!
thats the sort of level of work that people should meet..
*hopes i will too..*

why thank you. please dont look at my other work as that is shit compared to this, even tho this isnt completed. ya i actually worked hard on this, unlike my other flashes which i never completed or were dished out in a minimal amount of time.

still like them tho.

unfinished animations are the story of my life..
check out my site got a few on their but got a mountain of unfinished animations on memory sticks, cds and hdd all over the place :/

still.. when i finish one properly im happy and im working hard on one atm (not this collab) and hopefully will finish it in jan if i get my ass in gear a lil more

At 12/30/08 09:01 PM, satan112 wrote: unfinished animations are the story of my life..
check out my site got a few on their but got a mountain of unfinished animations on memory sticks, cds and hdd all over the place :/

still.. when i finish one properly im happy and im working hard on one atm (not this collab) and hopefully will finish it in jan if i get my ass in gear a lil more

i hear ya, ive got like 15 unfinished animations on my computer, and about 20 concept ideas which i havent even started on. im just lazy. but just recently ive remembered the joy of submitting a finished submission and having people say its awesome, so ive started working harder than before.

also, good luck on your part.

Bew idea for me

--2 guys in an alley--

1st guy: Hey.....
2nd guy: it's you! What do you want!
1st guy: I just wanted to know if you received my message.
2nd guy: What! What message....
1st guy: y'know the one about the LAZORRRRRR

BLARRRRRRRRRGH!!!
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I'm gonna try that.

At 12/31/08 10:13 AM, theactionscripter wrote: Bew idea for me

--2 guys in an alley--

1st guy: Hey.....
2nd guy: it's you! What do you want!
1st guy: I just wanted to know if you received my message.
2nd guy: What! What message....
1st guy: y'know the one about the LAZORRRRRR

BLARRRRRRRRRGH!!!
_____________________________________

I'm gonna try that.

This is what I have so far. Wow that is cool, I never thought I could make something like this!

THIS is not entirely finished but it is an update.

another update

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/4308/461 45_Coolness.php

How the hell did he just post 4 times in a row?

God, keep it to 2, if not 1 post.
-Matt

ya but you gotta admit. it is good compared to what he had previosly (look at sig for link)

still, tho, the word lazer gets cut off slightly.

At 12/31/08 03:08 PM, fluffkomix wrote: ya but you gotta admit. it is good compared to what he had previosly (look at sig for link)

still, tho, the word lazer gets cut off slightly.

it's not cut off!

Are there any remaining places? I would give it my all.

I fixed the cutoff that was there. (Thanks for pointing tat out Fluffkomix)

HERE