How is this looking?

[IcePyro]

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/3708/593 22_Dataguard_thing.php

im getting paid for it, so please be critical. thanks :)

it was develop from this and for these people (CR Technology)
http://www.crtechnology.ca/dataguard/pag e_02.html

[Saza]

Looks good! :) Maybe if you maybe the server come up with all that binary stuff and the little slots turn green?

[LesPaulPlayer]

Looks clean and crisp but not very professional. I can't put my finger exactly on why though.

[14hourlunchbreak]

You might want to change the background. I like the pixely map idea but the pixels seem too far apart.

[Saza]

I think it might be cause it's too.. simple that it doesnt look professional?

[IcePyro]

At 10/27/08 07:33 PM, Saza wrote: Looks good! :) Maybe if you maybe the server come up with all that binary stuff and the little slots turn green?

i thought about that, i'll try it and see how it looks.

At 10/27/08 07:35 PM, LesPaulPlayer wrote: Looks clean and crisp but not very professional. I can't put my finger exactly on why though.

thanks, if you can think of something to make it more professional, it'd be greatly appreciated.

At 10/27/08 07:36 PM, 14hourlunchbreak wrote: You might want to change the background. I like the pixely map idea but the pixels seem too far apart.

you mean the 2 sections? (north/south america and asia/south asia etc) are too far apart? cause if that's what you mean, im suprised you noticed that i did that :P

if it's obvious i'll change it back, if you mean something else, please tell

At 10/27/08 07:47 PM, Saza wrote: I think it might be cause it's too.. simple that it doesnt look professional?

that's possible, do you mean detail on the laptop and servers? i can work on them, and add keys and such, and make them look more realistic while still being obviously just a representation

[IcePyro]

dub sorry

btw it isn't finished yet. the entire video i mean

[korded]

Nice, try tweaking the transitions of the text as they come and go, experiment with blur filters and easing. Possibly try getting the binary and data transfer effects a little fancier in a techy kind of way, maybe some of the digits glowing a brighter green as they drop in, not too sure - maybe not. An upbeat but simple music loop would do this great justice.

[korded]

Took another glance - when the binary loads into the laptop initially, maybe try reducing it's size and have it feed in behind the file icon on the screen? Not coming out the bottom of course.

When the data then transfers to the server, the binary digits need a little work there I think. Initial thought is more use of the blur filter and a little speed on the tween. If you wanted to throw a slightly playful spin on things, you could have the line of binary zip over from the laptop to the server, and once the tail end of it disappears have a few loose binary digits come flying off and falling downward.

[mechanixnut]

You should fix the button at the beginning. There is a large clickable area around the computer. That part I don't think is very professional. Other than that, it looks really well done.

[SwanLi]

I think it's kinda slow. Making it slightly faster gives it more edge, along with some sound effects.

Try to make the viewer feel smart :P

[Cheese-on-toast]

This may sound dumb but is the spelling of "Data Gaurd" intentional?

[hesselbom]

You spelled 'guard' wrong. You wrote 'gaurd'.

[CyberXR]

Really nice is my opinion =)

Cool 3d effects. The matrix stuff was also good-looking. Didnt understand it actually, but it was nice anyways ;)

[Eisaysek]

Maybe you should make the shading more... radial or linear.

whats your frame rate? maybe speed that up. the words seem choppy.

I think that background it really good don't bother that.

[muffinman9]

Very nice but you seem to have misspelled "guard"

[Preternatural]

Find a less gimmicky way of illustrating the encryption process, slow the animation down a bit, pick a slower frame rate (like 24), desaturate the laptop's screen, change the font color (red seems kind of aggressive), pick better phrasing maybe.

Compare your work with the competition's, click here.

[IcePyro]

At 10/28/08 02:14 AM, korded wrote: When the data then transfers to the server, the binary digits need a little work there I think. Initial thought is more use of the blur filter and a little speed on the tween. If you wanted to throw a slightly playful spin on things, you could have the line of binary zip over from the laptop to the server, and once the tail end of it disappears have a few loose binary digits come flying off and falling downward.

agreed, i'll work on that, and i'll experiment with filters, but im not looking to lag the hell out of the viewer. and the binary digits falling down would suggest that data is lost = bad. :P

At 10/28/08 02:40 AM, mechanixnut wrote: You should fix the button at the beginning. There is a large clickable area around the computer. That part I don't think is very professional. Other than that, it looks really well done.

yeah, i did that on perpose, i'll just make the laptop clickable.

At 10/28/08 04:53 AM, SwanLi wrote: I think it's kinda slow. Making it slightly faster gives it more edge, along with some sound effects.

Try to make the viewer feel smart :P

actualy it is fairly fast, you just can't tell cause i don't have a loading bar in there and the video is under some perma lag atm.
either way, by a rule you should have enough time to read each line 3 times

At 10/28/08 05:44 AM, Cheese-on-toast wrote: This may sound dumb but is the spelling of "Data Gaurd" intentional?
At 10/28/08 05:49 AM, hesselbom wrote: You spelled 'guard' wrong. You wrote 'gaurd'.
At 10/28/08 08:52 AM, muffinman9 wrote: Very nice but you seem to have misspelled "guard"

OOPS! thanks for catching that :P. richard wouldn't have been happy

At 10/28/08 06:35 AM, Eisaysek wrote: Maybe you should make the shading more... radial or linear.

whats your frame rate? maybe speed that up. the words seem choppy.

I think that background it really good don't bother that.

i'll experiment with shading, and im at 30 right now, it's because the video doesn't load initially

At 10/28/08 09:50 AM, Preternatural wrote: Find a less gimmicky way of illustrating the encryption process, slow the animation down a bit, pick a slower frame rate (like 24), desaturate the laptop's screen, change the font color (red seems kind of aggressive), pick better phrasing maybe.

Compare your work with the competition's, click here.

i'll try some things with the encryption, and i don't like working at 24, the video isn't smooth, but i'll space things out a bit and add more frames.

agreed on the desaturation, and origionaly the font color was to match the companies colors but, im not bound by that. i'll try blue :P

Thanks for the comments everyone! me and my wallet all greatly appreciate the help :) :P
please keep commenting and i'll post my progress again after i put in a little more work.
there will likely be multiple version.

[TamiyaGuy]

In my opinion, that's very good. It is understandable, looks good, and isn't too long or short. I think you should go into a little more detail, though (or, even better, have the option of doing so), as it is just a little too basic for what I think it may be used for.

[JesseT]

Looks great a swell animation and explains lot's keep up the good work!

-JesseT

[IcePyro]

laptop quality update.

[zenyara]

I would mask the screen so the "encryption" animation stays within the monitor.

[MrMacro]

At 10/30/08 02:49 PM, IcePyro wrote: laptop quality update.

That looks so much better!

[mooseisloose]

At 10/30/08 02:49 PM, IcePyro wrote: laptop quality update.

excellent! i think overall it's really good...... although something about it just doesn't seem right... have no idea what though :s

[Saza]

Don't blur it as much, just enough to notice it is, but not enough to take away all of the sharp edges.

[IcePyro]

At 10/30/08 04:01 PM, Saza wrote: Don't blur it as much, just enough to notice it is, but not enough to take away all of the sharp edges.

i actualy didn't blur it, thats the result of many glows, i'm working on it though

[Preternatural]

At 10/28/08 11:05 AM, IcePyro wrote: i'll try some things with the encryption, and i don't like working at 24, the video isn't smooth, but i'll space things out a bit and add more frames.

Smooth movement isn't always appropriate. It tends to make things look more cartoonish.

At 10/30/08 02:49 PM, IcePyro wrote: laptop quality update.

Sweet update. Too much blur on the screen part?

[TrickyE]

Looks good but there is one thing I noticed right away. When you click to start the video, the laptop moves over a few pixels.

[Daza]

Looks good. My friend does this kind of stuff for Chrysler.

[IcePyro]

Thanks for the help so far, i've noticed some things that i too didn't like so i decided to just redo the whole thing, here's what i have so far.

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/4108/486 76_DataGuardVideoHQ.php

i cut down on animation to improve on detail, is that a bad thing?