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If someone falls out or doesnt want there part anymore, send it over to me ^^

Thanks Frax, that's a big help :)

Here's a little constructive criticism is you wish to take it :)
This was put together by certain people who shall remain nameless at the moment :D You can choose to leave it as it is if you wish or if you don't have time, but following this would bump up the score a bit. Just read the bit that applies to you if you please, and remember we are just suggesting things that could be done, not saying your part isn't good enough.

Part1: Needs more movements instead of just one thing going round and a round and add a background because it's a little too plain.

Part2: Add more different scenes instead of one scene with some little extra to it. Again this parts needs more movements and change the black background. It should have more colorful schemes.

Part3: Good use of background in the first scene. The second scene should have a new bg with some shadings just like the same thing in the first scene. The robot is going up and down a little too fast slow him down a little bit.

Part4: The part where it says the cake is a lie and that the girl is holding a box the hand anatomy should be worked out better. A little rough drawings but that's it supposed to be (I think).

Part5: This part needs more movements or add a lipsynching to the woman. Maybe some good ol' fashioned filtered text coming in time. Because this part seemed a bit too plain. Also, http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/250708/5 6985_that_was_great.JPG

Part6: This part seemed to done way to quickly. The tween movements should be better and the drawings should've been smoother. Change the gray colour scheme and don't rush on it to fast.

Part7: a bit too blank

Part 8: there didn't seem to be anything there

Part9: a bit hollow

Part10: Background's too plain. Add a vcam so we can feel that she is going up and down etc. IF you can add a some sort of a robot that is saying everything i.e. in the background where you see a red window saying the text in a robotic sort of font.

Part11: This part was a bit boring and plain it should have more things going in the part. Like robots, glados, the cake, boxes a good background etc. and then when goodbye comes it goes black since ths part should have a blasting end.

This wasn't made by me btw, but i pretty much agree with most things said here :) good luck guys! Thankyou all for taking part, it looks like it might be finished pretty soon now :D

I'm gonna try to spice my two parts up just a bit. It won't take more than an hour, though. I'll be back with the .flas

Here's the latest menu. My only worry is I'm going away next Friday so if someone drops out you'll have to wait for me to get back to edit new people in. :/

That, is, awesome. lol, well done souled! One thing i would say is you could make the text a little clearer on the credits, but i really like the style, if it's too much fiddling and stuff, thats no problem.

and thanks KyleDaFox, i had forgot you did two parts, thanks for putting the extra work in :D if you don't mind me saying so i think part 10 is better ^^ part 2 is the one that could do with some tweaks. Good luck!

At 7/25/08 11:38 AM, souled wrote: Here's the latest menu. My only worry is I'm going away next Friday so if someone drops out you'll have to wait for me to get back to edit new people in. :/

I suggest you should use this for the fire in the preloader.

SWF File :
http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/260708/4 5644_Fire.php

FLA File :
http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/260708/4 5652_Fire.fla

I agree about the fire thing.

I finished refining part 2, I'm still in the process of finishing my other part. I had something to do yesterday, so I couldn't get it done. I have something to do today, too, so I won't get it done until tomorrow or the day after.

Hell, what am I talking about? It didn't take long - 20 minutes at most, finished up my two parts.
Part 2
Part 10

Comments or suggestions before I send them to you?

At 7/26/08 11:05 AM, KyleDaFox wrote: Comments or suggestions before I send them to you?
Part 2

It's a little repetitive. That works fine, but this clip is just a little too long to keep repeating the same thing.

Part 10

Why did she seem to snap to normal position when she fires things? I'd say the animation needs to be smoother of her moving. Also when she moves her arm you can her back where there are no lines. :/

Good strong parts though, and I like the drawings.

yea, i really like the drawings, but the background in the second one is a little bit plain, if you just add a door there or something, or tiles like on my part, just a bit more detail in the background would be cool, still, thanks for adding those parts! :D

Hey guys i see im still in this one....cool....i have a little problem....my old computer crashed and burned so i havent got anything from my part and i have to start over.....plus i dont have flash instaled on this one......but i will try to install it as soon as possible =D

awesome, thanks dude! This is crazy-matt-cartoons btw, right? Thanks for sticking with it even though your computer has asplode.

Btw, on another note, my new cartoon, 'colours.' is out now, i would love you to watch it :D
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/45 1084

I loved your new cartoon....fucking awesome........
Btw set my name in the collab to Peglay not crazy-matt-cartoons....ok?

thanks :D and i'll change the name in the list, remember to change it in the menu souled!

part 1 - Octoflash (done)
part 2 - KyleDaFox (done)
part 3 - Oggycheese (done)
part 4 - Art-Saint (done)
part 5 - Frax (done)
part 6 - IzaacBarratt (done)
part 7 - Vato
part 8 - Peglay
part 9 - Aethios
part 10 - KyleDaFox (done)
part 11 - Zairex (done)

At 7/30/08 03:20 PM, Oggy-cheese wrote: remember to change it in the menu souled!

*groan*

I broke apart the text....

owch, hehe. Well crazy-matt-cartoons is currently a blank account, no good linking to that one :P sorry!

Hey Oggy, would you like me to make a quick lil' preloader game? I have an idea and it'll take like a half hour. I guess I'll make one and we'll see if you like it. The only think is, souled would have to add a play button to the preloader. If he can make that, we can have a preloader game.

So yeah, I'll make a preloader game if souled wants to put a play button into the preloader.
And yeah, I agree with Frax on the fire for the preloader.

Awesome, kk, I'm not sure if it needs a preloader game, but after seeing the file size i guess it might do :D not even all the parts are here yet :P now about the menu and stuff, do you want me to get it all into working order? You can send it me and i'll send the buttons to the right place, if you want to do it i guess that's fine, it just means sending a huge file over to you and it might be a bit fiddly and take a while to figure out what's going on :P

This is the first collab i have ever organised, or indeed taken part in, so I'm not really sure how all that stuff works with who does the menu bits, but I'm experienced in the scene select and menu stuff so I'm willing to do it, i have hardly anything to do with this collab atm :P

Oggy, when everyone's done I'll finish the menu, and all you have to do is put people's parts in the right scene.

ok, sounds simple enough. Cheers.

The longest time taken on this was drawing... >.>
http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/300708/6 8301_Portal_Collab_Preloader_Game.php

Comments, suggestions, or questions?
Enjoy,
-KDF

Yea that's good, thanks man! You could add a really simple background, but it's not necessary, nice drawing too ^^

Thanks, since the preloader didn't have a background, I didn't put one.
Here's the fla, souled, if you want to fanagle it into the preloader some how. Just make sure to add a play button.

Here it is:
http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/310708/3 9161_Portal_Collab_Preloader_Game_Flash_
8.fla

-KDF

I'm going away for a week, so if people finish all their parts before then you'll have to wait a few days. :/

yea that makes sense KyleDaFox, good job :) and i doubt people will be done in a week hehe.

Right now I am wondering what to add because I also agree that it is a little too plain.
So far I have only added the companion cube with wings floating up.
I also had an idea that it would pull back more quickly and at "goodbye" you would see a warehouse full of companion cubes (like there are hundred of other test subjects)

What do think? and What else should I add?

yea, that would be cool, the warehouse thing that is. You could add some other test subjects slowly going towards the cake with a knife, and a party hat? Just an idea xD

anybody have updates on parts, so we can see how they're coming along? That would be great, also, please feel free to post on this thread, seems sorta dead at the moment!

Oggy, can you make an update about the part list and who's done or still working?
Also, do you need any help putting it together? If there are any problems, feel free to ask me.

part 1 - Octoflash (done)
part 2 - KyleDaFox (done)
part 3 - Oggycheese (done)
part 4 - Art-Saint (done)
part 5 - Frax (done)
part 6 - IzaacBarratt (done)
part 7 - Vato
part 8 - Peglay
part 9 - Aethios
part 10 - KyleDaFox (done)
part 11 - Zairex (done)

Menu - souled (done, when 7, 8 and 9 are done)
Menu game - KyleDaFox (done)

parts list still remains as that. Thanks for the help, but i got the putting together stuff sorted thanks :)