At 2/20/10 08:40 PM, nothingmater wrote:
theres the link. But i just need some ideas to make it better, this is just the intro and part of the beginning. Its no where near done yet.
so keep that in mind
Well it seems to get out of synch near the end of the intro. At 0:29 to be exact is where the synth strings get out of synch with the rhythm. You need to tighten that up by either changing a rhythm, aligning the synth strings in the beginning with the rhythm in the percussion better, or just changing what you've written.
Once the piano sort of sound and perc rhythms come in it sounds good, but you stopped right at about where a significant change needs to take place. Personally I could hear some very nice Santana sort of guitar work going in there. Something laid back, but with a lot of detail. Or you could repeat the section actually and throw in some nice vocal work over top of it the second time around.
You might want to do something really off the wall and change up the rhythm so it is slower and more pronounced. Then over top of that you could create some nifty chord progressions with the piano and then lay down some nasty electric guitar or synth melody lines.
They one thing that I'm positive of is that the next section should be fuller than the one you finished this WIP with. It should expand where you left off by adding new instruments, or making things a bit more deliberate in your approach. For example like this....
You subdivide the beat like this in 4/4 time...
1 e and a 2 e and a 3 e and a 4 e and a
You can hear where your rhythm is now landing on every single division of the beat. Every single syllable in this counting rhythm is accented. What you could do is this in the next section...
1 e and a 2 e and a3 e and a4 e and a
If I didn't screw up the bold type in this example then that rhythm should probably create a more elongated feel to the next section making it easier to fatten it up. By doing this it would make it really easy to lay down some nice chords in the piano in however you see fit, and then layer a melody line of whatever you choose over top of it.
Also as I often joke with my buddy IO you can add about 5,000 filter effects to white noise and the kiddies here on Newgrounds will hail you as a musical genius. So if you want to go the easy route just ignore what I said, throw one 10 layers of white noise, and then 5,000 filter effects all automated to the enth degree. You would be guaranteed front page if you did that. ;-)
Hope you find this helpful and best of luck.